Question

5．上周末你带了个外国朋友游览了梅园（Wuxi Plum Garden）．请根据要点写一篇短文．
1．梅园是无锡最著名的名胜之一，每天吸引大量游客来赏景；
2．几年前，有些游客无视保护环境的重要性；
3．如今发生了巨大的变化，游客们再也不…；
4．将全身心投入学习，将来把无锡建成最适合人居的地方．
注意：1．第3要点的内容须用3-4句话展开合理想象，作适当发挥；
2．词数80个左右．
Last weekend，I showed a foreign friend around Wuxi Plum Garden．It is one of themost famous places of interest in Wuxi．Every day a large number of tourists are attracted here to enjoyits beauty．Years ago，some tourists paid no attention to the importance ofprotecting the environment．Now great changes have taken place．Tourists don't litter about any more．They don't walk on grass．They don't pick up the flowers．They don't destroy the things in the game．I willput all my effort into my study and make Wuxithe most suitable place to live．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是介绍无锡梅园．时态主要为一般现在时和一般过去时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．梅园是无锡最著名的名胜之一，每天吸引大量游客来赏景；
2．几年前，有些游客无视保护环境的重要性；
3．如今发生了巨大的变化，游客们再也不…；（此要点的内容须用3-4句话展开合理想象，作适当发挥）
4．将全身心投入学习，将来把无锡建成最适合人居的地方．
常用到的重点短语：
places of interest名胜
pay attention to 留意
take place 发生
not…any more不再

【高分句型】
1．It is①one of the most famous ②places of interest in Wuxi．
①one of+最高级+名词复数，表示最怎么样的…之一
②places of interest名胜
2．I will①put all my effort into my study and make Wuxithe most suitable place ②to live．
①put all one's effort into 全身心投入
②动词不定式做后置定语，修饰place．

解答 Onepossible version：
Last weekend，I showed a foreign friend around Wuxi Plum Garden．It is one of the most famous places of interest in Wuxi．【高分句型】Every day a large number of tourists are attracted here to enjoy its beauty．（梅园是无锡最著名的名胜之一，每天吸引大量游客来赏景）Years ago，some tourists paid no attention to the importance of protecting the environment．（几年前，有些游客无视保护环境的重要性）Now great changes have taken place．Tourists don't litter about any more．They don't walk on grass．They don't pick up the flowers．They don't destroy the things in the game．（如今发生了巨大的变化）I will put all my effort into my study and make Wuxithe most suitable place to live．【高分句型】（将全身心投入学习，将来把无锡建成最适合人居的地方）

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．