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7．近年来，北仑区委区政府本着"既要金山银山，又要绿水青山"这一宗旨，加快城市生态环境建设，努力营造天蓝水清地绿鸟语花香的绿色北仑．作为青少年的我们，在保护环境和节约能源方面，我们应该做些什么？不应该做些什么？怎样使我们的生活环境更适合居住？请你结合自己所看所想谈谈自己的看法，字数80字左右．


Good environment is very important to everyone．It's our duty to protect the environment．
But now we find evironment problems aroud us are becoming more and more serious．For example，factories pour different kinds of polluted water into the rivers，trees on the hill are cut down，the air is not fresh any more，people drop litter everywhere．So，we students should try our best to make our city clean again．We are supposed to plant more trees and make them grow well．When we go shopping，we can use our own cloth bags instead of plastic bags．We must never waste water．we should turn off the taps as soon as we finish using water．We can volunteer our spare time to make more people know how important the environment is to us．If everyone concentrates more on the environment，Beilun will become more and more beautiful!．

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分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是谈谈怎样使我们的生活环境更适合居住．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1自己看到的破坏环境的行为
2看法和建议．
常用到的重点短语：
pour…into…把…倒入…
cut down 砍倒
try one's best to do sth 竭尽全力做某事
be supposed to 应该
instead of 而不是
turn off 关掉
concentrate on关注
【高分句型】
1．①When we go shopping，we can use our own cloth bags②instead of plastic bags．
①when引导的时间状语从句
②instead of 而不是

2．①If everyone②concentrates more on the environment，Beilun will become ③more and more beautiful!
①if引导的条件状语从句．遵循主将从现的规则．
②concentrate on关注
③比较级+and+比较级  越来越…

解答 Good environment is very important to everyone．It's our duty to protect the environment
But now we find evironment problems aroud us are becoming more and more serious．For example，factories pour different kinds of  polluted water into the rivers，trees on the hill are cut down，the air is not fresh any more，people drop litter everywhere．（自己看到的破坏环境的行为）So，we students should try our best to make our city clean again．We are supposed to plant more trees and make them grow well．When we go shopping，we can use our own cloth bags instead of plastic bags．【高分句型】We must never waste water．we should turn off the taps as soon as we finish using water．We can volunteer our spare time to make more people know how important the environment is to us．If everyone concentrates more on the environment，Beilun will become more and more beautiful!【高分句型】（看法和建议）

点评 此为材料作文，要仔细审题，抓住重点，将所给信息条理清楚的表达出来，可使用一些表示顺序的词，使论述更明确，更有层次感．还要注意多使用一些委婉的提建议的句型，尽量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥单调．要求语句通顺，语法，词汇，时态正确，书写规范