Question

6．假设你是Li Hua，请你用英文给你校外教Jim发一封电子邮件，主要内容包括：
1．今天下午，你上体育课时伤了左脚，明天不能去上他的课．
2．邀请他参加下周的英语俱乐部活动．
时间：下周五下午4点
地点：初三一班
活动内容：用英文讨论粉吸计划，并希望他能给同学们一些如何提高英语的建议．
3．如果有问题，可以打电话或发电子邮件联系．
注意：
1．文中不得出现涉及考生真实信息的人名、地名或校名．
2．可适当增加细节，使行文连贯．
3．词数70-110，开头、结尾已经给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Jim，
I'm Li Hua，one of the students in your spoken English class．I'm sorry to tell you that I can't go to your class tomorrow．The reason why I ask for leave is that I hurt my left foot in the P．E．class this afternoon．
Besides，I'd like to invite you to join in the activity in our English club next Friday．It'll start at 4 p．m．in Class1，Grade 3．We'll talk about the plan for the coming summer vacation in English．And we'll be very glad if you can give us some advice on how to improve our English．Call me or send me an email if you have any questions．
I'm looking forward to your early reply．
Yours．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 此作文要求写一封信．通过阅读材料可知这篇作文主要使用的人称就是第一人称，时态为一般现在时态，题中包含了这些要点：①今天下午，你上体育课时伤了左脚，明天不能去上他的课；②邀请他参加下周的英语俱乐部活动；③如果有问题，可以打电话或发电子邮件联系．注意不要遗漏要点，句子要通顺连贯，没有语法错误．
高分句型一：
The reason why I ask for leave is that I hurt my left foot in the P．E．class this afternoon我请假的原因是今天下午的体育课上伤了左脚．这是Why引导的定语从句，先行词是reason，后面的that I hurt my left foot in the P．E．class this afternoon是that引导的表语从句．
高分句型二：
And we'll be very glad if you can give us some advice on how to improve our English如果你能给我们一些关于如何提高我们的英语的建议，我们将非常高兴．这是一个if引导的条件状语从句，主句用一般将来时，从句用一般现在时．

解答 Dear Jim，
    I'm Li Hua，one of the students in your spoken English class．I'm sorry to tell you that I can't go to your class tomorrow．The reason why I ask for leave is that I hurt my left foot in the P．E．class this afternoon【高分句型一，注意定语从句的使用】．【要点一】
    Besides，I'd like to invite you to join in the activity in our English club next Friday．It'll start at 4 p．m．in Class1，Grade 3．We'll talk about the plan for the coming summer vacation in English．And we'll be very glad if you can give us some advice on how to improve our English．【高分句型二，if引导的条件状语从句】【要点二】Call me or send me an email if you have any questions．【要点三】
    I'm looking forward to your early reply．
                                                                                 Yours，
                                                                                 Li Hua

点评 本篇写作需注意要求中所提供的要点，不可遗漏．需在平时积累相关的词汇，多阅读此类题材，将词汇归类整理；动笔前可以按照材料内容列出简单提纲，写出关键单词．写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系．上下文之间可以适当使用连接词．如but，so，then等．