Question

10．为了进一步增强中学生的安全意识，提高自我保护能力，学校将开展以"安全"为主题的英语演讲比赛．请你根据以下要点提示和要
求写一篇演讲稿．

慎重交友	make friends，be careful，especially on line，…
遇险报警	be in danger，keep calm，call the police for help，…
安全饮食	buy and eat food carefully，read instructions and dates，go bad，…
遵守交通规则	obey the traffic rules，keep to the right in the street，…
…	…

要求：1）内容必须包括所给的全部要点，可适当发挥；
2）表达清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯，书写规范；
3）词数80左右．文章开头已给出，不计入总词数．
How to Keep Safe
As teenagers we should always keep safety in mind．But how can we keep safe？Here are some of my suggestions．
First，we should be careful when we make friends，especially on line．Second，if we are in danger，we must keep calm and call the police for help in time so that we can keep ourselves safe．Third，we'd better buy and eat food carefully．If the food is in bags，we should read instructions and dates before eating it．Eating food that goes bad will do harm to our health．Fourth，we must obey the traffic rules when we go out．Don't cross the street when the traffic lights are red．Keep to the right in the street．Besides，summer is coming and we must remember it's dangerous to swim in the river．
In a word，safety must come first!．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是写一篇有关怎样保证安全的演讲稿．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．慎重交友 尤其是网上交友
2．遇险报警 处于危难，保持冷静，报警求助
3．安全饮食 买或者吃食物要仔细，看日期，是否变质，…
4．遵守交通规则 遵守交规，走路的右边
常用到的重点短语：
make friends交朋友
keep calm保持冷静
had better do sth 最好做某事
go bad 变质
do harm to 对…不利
obey rules 遵守规则
【高分句型】
1．Second，①if we are in danger，we must②keep calm and call the police for help in time③so that we can keep ourselves safe．
①if引导的条件状语从句，主句含有情态动词must，从句用一般现在时．
②keep calm保持冷静，ask sb for help 喊某人帮忙，in time 及时．
③so that引导的目的状语从句
2．Eating food ①that goes bad will ②do harm to our health．
①that作为关系词的定语从句，that作为从句的主语，修饰先行词food．
②do harm to 对…不利
3．Besides，summer is coming and we must remember it's dangerous to swim in the river．
remember后省略了引导词that的宾语从句，it是形式主语，动词不定式是真正主语．

解答 How to Keep Safe
   As teenagers，we should always keep safety in mind．But how can we keep safe？Here are some of my suggestions．
   First，we should be careful when we make friends，especially on line．（慎重交友 尤其是网上交友）Second，if we are in danger，we must keep calm and call the police for help in time so that we can keep ourselves safe．（遇险报警 处于危难，保持冷静，报警）【高分句型】Third，we'd better buy and eat food carefully．If the food is in bags，we should read instructions and dates before eating it．Eating food that goes bad will do harm to our health．（安全饮食 仔细买或者吃食物，看日期，是否变质）【高分句型】Fourth，we must obey the traffic rules when we go out．Don't cross the street when the traffic lights are red．Keep to the right in the street．（遵守交通规则 遵守交规，走路的右边）Besides，summer is coming and we must remember it's dangerous to swim in the river．（游泳注意安全）【高分句型】
   In a word，safety must come first!

点评 此为材料作文，要仔细审题，抓住重点，将所给信息条理清楚的表达出来，可使用一些表示顺序的词，使论述更明确，更有层次感．还要注意多使用一些委婉的提建议的句型，尽量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥单调．要求语句通顺，语法，词汇，时态正确，书写规范