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最近，洛阳小伙扶摔倒老人被讹一事引起了社会的广泛关注，人们都在议论还该不该去做好事，帮助他人。而“Positive Energy”一词早已对我们中国人产生了很大影响，因此，很多人并不会因此就不去做好事了。瞧！你身边就有很多助人为乐的同学，他们的事例值得我们学习。请根据下面表格信息给学校校刊写一篇短文，谈谈身边的好人好事，号召大家向他们学习。词数60—80（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）

Who they are	What they usually do to help others
Liu Chang	make our school beautiful (clean the classroom..)
Li Bing	help other students with their studies…
Zhang Ling	help the people in trouble (cheer others up…)
…	…

Dear Editor,

In our school, some students are always thinking more of others and ready to help them. I am moved deeply. Here is what they usually do.

Liu Chang is a very good student.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I hope everyone can learn from them and do something for others.

Yours,

Mark

 

Answer 1

Dear Editor,

In our school, some students are always thinking more of others and ready to help them. I am moved deeply. Here is what they usually do.

Liu Chang is a very good student. He is not good at studying but also like to makes our school beautiful. He always cleans the classroom although he is not on duty. He thinks a clean environment is good for studying. Li Bing, who is a kind-hearted student, is ready to help students with their studies. When students have study problems, they like to turn to him for help. And Zhang Ling, a good student in our class, is very popular in our school, because she always helps the people in trouble. She usually tells jokes or some moving stories to cheer them up. Besides them, there are some other students like to help others.

I hope everyone can learn from them and do something for others.

Yours,

Mark

【解析】

试题分析：这是篇命题作文。题中给出了写作的要点，写作时注意要包含所有要点信息，并加以扩展，使用适当的连接性的句子和短语来加强各要点间的逻辑。另外，注意主谓一致和时态的准确使用。

【亮点说明】这篇文章要点齐全，表达准确流利。文中使用了一些长难句He is not good at studying but also like to makes our school beautiful.他不仅学习好而且喜欢让学校变得更漂亮。Not only…but also不仅，而且。Li Bing, who is a kind-hearted student, is ready to help students with their studies.李冰是个热心肠的学生，他总是帮助其他同学的学习。句中用了定语从句who is a kind-hearted student。

考点：提纲类作文。