Question

根据下面所提供的材料写一篇短文．

1．明天我们班要去城里的动物园．

2．动物园里有许多动物，如老虎、狮子等．

3．动物园里还有儿童乐园，孩子们可以在那儿尽情的游玩．

4．词数：80～100词．

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解析：

学生：习作： Our zoo 　　Our class is going to visit the zoo tomorrow. In our city there is a big zoo have(X1) a lot of animals in it. There are some beautiful tigers and two old lions. They eat much meat every day. There are also two big elephants. They are kind animals. They eat lot(X2). They like children. Children often give bread and bananas to them. 　　In our zoo there are brown white and black bears. They stand on their back legs. hold up their front legs and ask food(X3). They like cakes best. 　　In our zoo there is a children's Corner. Children ride horses and see(X4) the monkeys there. The monkeys are very funny. They climb up hills and jump down again and play with each other as(X5) small children. 　　剖析：1．have(has)用于有生命的名词，表示所属关系，如：Tom has many books. Tom有很多书．there be表示“存在”，是“(存在)的有”．如：There are two blackboards in our classroom．我们教室里有两块黑板．而with是介词，表示伴随，不能做谓语，The man with a book in his hand is our English teacher, Mr Jiang．那位手里(拿着)本书的是我们的英语老师，姜老师．本句里已有动词is，所以have应改为with．(with…hand介词短语作后置定语，修饰man) 　　2．a lot是固定短语，表示“大量，很多”，所以lot前应加上a． 　　3．ask是“请、问”之意，而此处是“索要，要”，因此，ask后要加上for．(ask for需要) 　　4．see是指“看见”的结果，而此处是指“注视、观看”，所以要改为watch． 　　5．作为“像……一样”解时，like是介词，后跟宾语；而as是连词，后跟从句． 　　如：请尽量像我一样写．Please try to write as I do. Please try to write like me． 　　总评：作者对动物园的介绍比较详细，对几种动物的描述淋漓尽致，充分体现了小作者赞美动物园的思想感情，在写作上能运用学过的语法，语句通顺，简练．