Question

【题目】书面表达

以My ________为题写一篇60词左右的短文。

要求：

1.补全题目。

2.书写整洁，语句、标点运用、单词拼写正确。

3.若写人物文中不得出现真名。

Answer 1

【答案】

My friend

I have a friend. His name is Jim. He is from the USA. Now he lives in China with his family. He is 13 years old. We are in the same class. He has short hair and wears glasses. He wears a blue jacket. Blue is his favorite color. He likes Chinese very much. He also likes playing basketball. He is good at it. He often plays basketball with his classmates after school. He wants to be a basketball player when he grows up.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文是一个开放性的作文，题目是My...，首先我们应先补充好题目，我们可以介绍自己的一件东西，也可以介绍自己的朋友或是家人。补充完题目之后，我们开始构思写作的内容，如果的介绍事物的，我们可以说说它的外貌、特征、颜色，喜欢这个事物的原因等。如果是介绍人物的，我们可以介绍这个人的姓名、年龄、外貌、兴趣爱好等等。这样的短语应使用一般现在时态，要正确使用be动词和其他动词形式，如果主语是第三人称单数形式，还需要使用动词的第三人称单数形式。写作时，还应使用一些连词和好的句式，使文章的表达更加连贯和流畅。

写作亮点：这篇作文给我们介绍的是他的朋友，这是一篇介绍人物的短文，作者主要是从姓名、年龄、国籍、外貌、喜好、梦想等方面来介绍的。短文的内容非常充实、完整，表达也很有秩序，有条理。短文里也使用了正确的人称和时态，主要是第三人称He，故谓语动词都用了第三人称单数形式，符合语法的规范和要求。短文里也使用了一些较好的短语和句型，如He is from the USA. Now he lives in China with his family、He has short hair and wears glasses、He is good at it、He wants to be a basketball player when he grows up等。这些句型使文章的表达根据流畅，意思也更连贯。