Question

【题目】书面表达：

请你以学生会主席吴兵的名义，根据下列提示，给学校方校长写封推荐信，推荐林涛获得本年度的新星奖，字数100词左右，开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

能力	聪明，学东西快 学习努力，擅长弹钢琴、打排球
个性	考虑事情周全，把每件事情都计划的很好，经常参加为有困难的孩子举行的筹款活动
事迹	非常勇敢，上学期，他的邻居，79岁的孙奶奶的厨房着火了，他冲进去，用湿毯子裹住孙奶奶将她救了出来，他受了重伤，住院两个月

Dear Mr. Fang,

I would like to______________________________________________________________.

______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

We all think that_______________________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________________________

Yours faithfully,

Wu Bing

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mr. Fang,

I would like to recommend Lin Tao to be the award of New Star. He is clever and can learn things very fast. He studies hard and he is good at playing the piano and playing volleyball. He is considerate and plans everything well. He often takes part in some activities to raise money for children in trouble. He is also very brave. Last term, his neighbor 79-year-old Grandma Sun’s kitchen was on fire. He rushed in and saved Grandma Sun using a wet carpet. He was badly injured and was in hospital for two months.

We all think that Lin Tao is suitable for the award. Please accept our recommendation.

Yours Faithfully,

Wu Bing

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以学生会主席吴兵的名义，给方校长写一封信，主要内容是推荐林涛获得本年度的新星奖。既然是一封推荐信，在信中我们应注意说明推荐的理由。题目中共给出了三个理由：一是在林涛的个人能力上；二是他的个性；第三是他的事迹。短文中我们要将这些内容都包括在内。通过分析可知，前两项的内容我们应使用一般现在时态，因为主语是第三人称He，谓语动词应该用三单形式；第三项介绍林涛的事迹时，因为是发生在上个学期的事情，故应该用一般过去时态，动词要变成过去式。写作时，还应使用一些我们平时积累和记忆的句型和短语，要注意符合英语的语法规范和写作习惯。使用一些连词和好的句型，使文章的意思连贯，表达流畅。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的作文。短文里作者根据题目的要求，举荐了林涛获得新星奖。首先作者开门见山，点明了自己写这封信的目的。接下来作者开始陈述自己的理由。从三个方面进行了解释。短文的内容非常完整，包含了题目中给出的所有信息，叙述也非常的有条理。短文里作者使用了正确的人称和时态，尤其是注意了句中动词形式的变化，语言准确，语法合乎英语的表达规范。短文里还使用了一些好的句型，如 He studies hard and he is good at playing the piano and playing volleyball、He often takes part in some activities to raise money for children in trouble.、He rushed in and saved Grandma Sun using a wet carpet、He was badly injured and was in hospital for two months.等。