Question

20．假设你是李明．上周日你班举行了一次毕业聚会．请根据以下提示，给你的英国笔友 Robert 写一封邮件，向他描述聚会的情况及谈谈你当时的感受．

要求：1．语句通顺，意思连贯，语法正确，书写规范；
2．必须包含所给提示，并做适当发挥；
3．行文中不得出现真实人名、校名或地名；
4．词数 80左右．（邮件的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）
Hi Robert，
We had a graduation party last Sunday．…Long before 3：00 pm，all the s tudents in my class couldn't wait to come to the hall．Our teachers and parents were invited to the party，too．First，ourmonitor made a speech．He thanked our teachers and parents sincerely．Next，we gave presentsto each other．The most exciting moment was the show time．We sang，danced and played games．Our English teacher told a story which made us all laugh．Everyone was so happy．I think the wonderful party will always be in my mind．
Do you have such a party？Please write soon．
Yours，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇应用文，让我们根据图片内容写一描述毕业晚会的邮件，内容是开放的，需要我们发挥自己的想象力、创造力和思维力，把这些内容补充完整．由题目可知，写作时要用第一、三人称，时态主要为一般过去时，内容要点包括：聚会情况以及当时的感受．
重要短语及高分句型：
have a graduation party
举行一次毕业聚会
give presents to each other
互送礼物
tell a story
讲故事
Long before 3：00 pm，all the students in my class couldn't wait to come to the hall．
下午三点前很久，我班所有的学生就迫不及待地来到大厅．long before在…前很久，can't wait to do sth．迫不及待地做某事，两个短语用得好．
Our English teacher told a story which made us all laugh．
我们的英语老师讲了一个让我们所有人发笑的故事．tell a story讲故事，make sb．do使得某人做某事，make使动用法，后跟不带to的不定式．which made us all laugh是定语从句，作story的定语．
First，our monitor made a speech．
首先，我们的班长做了一个演讲．first这个连接词用得好，make a speech做演讲，是重要短语．

解答 One possible version：
Hi Robert，
    We had a graduation party last Sunday．Long before 3：00 pm，all the students in my class couldn't wait to come to the hall．（高分句型）Our teachers and parents were invited to the party，too．First，our monitor made a speech．（高分句型）He thanked our teachers and parents sincerely．Next，we gave presents to each other．The most exciting moment was the show time．We sang，danced and played games．Our English teacher told a story which made us all laugh．（高分句型）（聚会情况）Everyone was so happy．I think the wonderful party will always be in my mind．（当时的感受）
Do you have such a party？Please write soon．
 
                                                               Yours，Li Ming

点评 写应用文时，首先要看懂图画所表达的内容，最好列一下提纲，然后根据提纲进行写作就不会造成离题或偏题，但要注意，文章必须要覆盖整个要点，行文要注意简化，不要拖沓冗长，要使用正确的句子，同时注意，要使用一定的连接词，比如：first，second，what's more，finally等．再者，在作文完成时要注意检查、修改，如果有时间可以先写到草稿纸上，再抄到答题纸上，这样更容易得高分．最后，注意使用一些句型和短语，使整篇文章意思连贯、流畅，方能成就一篇好的作文．