Question

11．假如你是初三学生李华，近日你发现校园里学生吃零食现象非常严重．根据图表信息，请你以"校园拒绝零食"为主题，写一封倡议书．

写作要求：
1．根据图表信息进行写作，可适当发挥，以使行文连贯；
 2．词数80-100．文章开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
3．文中不得出现与考生本人相关的真实姓名、校名和地名等信息．
参考词汇：零食 snacks           包装袋 wrappers

Dear students，
Recently，a lot of students eat snacks at school．It has caused serious problems．Some students are spending much money on snacks．Eating snacks is a waste of money．It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．In addition，most snacks have too much fat and sugar．They are unhealthy food．Eating too much may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw wrappers everywhere．As middle school students，we shouldn't eat snacks any more．
Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．
Yours sincerely，Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以"校园拒绝零食"为主题，写一封倡议书．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1零食的危害：污染环境、浪费钱、无益健康；
2我们应该采取的行动
常用到的重点短语：
spend+金钱+on sth  花钱做某事
a waste of 浪费
get rid of 放弃
in addition 另外
too much  太多
what's worse 糟糕的是
【高分句型】
1．Eating snacks is a waste of money．    
动名词短语做主语，谓语动词用单数is．
2．It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．
it是形式主语，that从句是真正主语．
3．Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．       
let's do sth 让我们做某事．提出建议．

解答 Dear students，
Recently，a lot of students eat snacks at school．It has caused serious problems．Some students are spending much money on snacks．Eating snacks is a waste of money．【高分句型】It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．【高分句型】In addition，most snacks have too much fat and sugar．They are unhealthy food．Eating too much may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw wrappers everywhere．（零食的危害）As middle school students，we shouldn't eat snacks any more．
Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．【高分句型】（我们应该采取的行动）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

点评 本题要求以中学生李华的名义，以"校园拒绝零食"为主题，写一封倡议书．根据图表提示，短文应从吃零食的危害：污染环境、浪费钱、无益健康；我们应该采取的行动等等方面展开写作．短文要用一般现在时态及带有情态动词的句子，用第一称形式进行表达．作为一封倡议书，要注意思想积极健康，语言精炼简捷．短文用dear称呼学生，配合情态动词should，语言亲切，感染力强．短文首先指出了学校许多学生吃零食的现象，并总体指出其造成了严重的问题．然后从浪费钱、无益健康、污染环境几方面讲述吃零食的危害．层次清楚．其中用了动名词短语作主语、主语从句等等语法结构，具体生动；最后倡议大家：不再吃零食，拒绝零食．主旨鲜明，主题突出．