Question

13．自你进入初中学习以来已近三年．现在的你与三年前相比一定发生了不小的变化吧．你能试着从以下几个方面进行回顾，并谈一谈你对自己这些变化的感受．
A．请根据自己的实际情况，用单词或短语完成下列表格．

	Appearance	Hobbies	Study	Abilities
In the past
At present
Feelings

B．根据表格中所填内容，以"The Changes to Me"为题，写一篇小短文．
注意：
1．语言通顺，意思连贯，书写规范；
2．词数100左右，必须涵盖你在表格中所填写的所有信息，并作适当发挥．
3．文中不得出现真实的人名和校名．
The Changes to Me
The changes to me
I have changed a lot since I became a middle school student．
Three years ago，I was a happy girl，but I seldom thought of others．In the past，myeyesightwas very good and I had long hair．I loved playing computer games and I often stayed up late to read magazines．I wasn't the top student in my class，and I was usually told to change my wrong answers into correct ones．I couldn't play the piano though I loved it．
Things have changed a lot．Now，I have short hair．I study harder and I do not spend too much time on computer games and magazines．The articles written by me are often read in class．I can play the piano now and I often play it to relax myself．But sadly，my eyesight is becoming poorer and poorer because of too much schoolwork．．
I think some good changes can help me realize my dream．With these good changes，I believe I will be even better in the next three years．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇给材料作文，写一写自己初中三年的变化．由于在要点中只给出了写作的大致方向，需要自己发挥的地方较多．动笔前要围绕要点组织材料，确定时态主要词汇等问题，根据要求可知本句主要是一般过去时态和现在完成时，人称是第一人称，注意时态与时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题．写作中，应注意描述的全面性；语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯．
高分句型一
I have changed a lot since I became a middle school student自从我成为一名中学生以来，我改变了很多．这是一个现在完成时的句子，since…用在现在完成时中．
高分句型二
My eyesight is becoming poorer and poorer because of too much schoolwork因为作业太多，我的视力越来越差．
more and more越来越…，because of因为，后跟单词或短语．

解答 The changes to me
I have changed a lot since I became a middle school student．【高分句型一，注意现在完成时的使用】
Three years ago，I was a happy girl，but I seldom thought of others．In the past，my eyesight was very good and I had long hair．I loved playing computer games and I often stayed up late to read magazines．I wasn't the top student in my class，and I was usually told to change my wrong answers into correct ones．I couldn't play the piano though I loved it．【要点一，过去的情况】
Things have changed a lot．Now，I have short hair．I study harder and I do not spend too much time on computer games and magazines．The articles written by me are often read in class．I can play the piano now and I often play it to relax myself．But sadly，my eyesight is becoming poorer and poorer because of too much schoolwork．【高分句型二，注意more and more句型的使用】．【要点二，现在的情况】
I think some good changes can help me realize my dream．With these good changes，I believe I will be even better in the next three years．【我的感受】

点评 本篇写作需注意要求中所提供的要点，不可遗漏．需在平时积累相关的词汇，多阅读此类题材，将词汇归类整理；动笔前可以按照材料内容列出简单提纲，写出关键单词．写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系．上下文之间可以适当使用连接词．如but，so，then等．