Question

假定你是中学生李华。在一位名叫TigerMom的学生家长的博客上，你看到如下内容。请你根据博客内容、写作要点和要求，给这位家长回复。

I'm the mother of a fourteen-year-old girl. I have a rule for my daughter: be among the top 5 students or get punished in one way or another. She has been doing very well in school, but some friends of mine keep telling me that I put too much pressure(压力)on her. Am l wrong?

写作要点：

1．表明自己的看法；

2．陈述自己的理由（可举例说明）；

3．提出至少两条建议

注意：

1．词数90左右：

2．短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；

3．短文须包括所有内容要点；可适当发挥，使其通顺、连贯：

4．短文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。

Hi，TigerMom，

What troubles you is actually a trouble for many parents in China. My idea is that

 

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

Hi，TigerMom，

    What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China. My idea is that it is not quite right for you to do so.

Although high grades are an important factor in evaluating students and their future university admission, development in wisdom, emotion, health and life attitude at school never be ignored. There are many examples around us. Some all-A student in school have turned out not to be ac successful in society as they were expected. The reason is often that the pressure from their parents allows them almost no time for other activities. Furthermore, punishment is by no means a wise choice to help them grow up mentally and physically.

So I suggest that you take your friends’ advice. More importantly, let her live like a lovely girl; let her have more friends and social activities; and let her make takes of her own as we teenagers often do.

【解析】

试题分析：本文的写作首先表明自己的看法，可以说明这样对女孩施以压力的方法是不对，表明自己并不赞同这样做；然后说明自己的理由，可以说明孩子在压力过大中学习生活对自己的学习并不好，只会成为书呆子bookworm,并不能很好的适应这个社会，也不能和同学很好的相处，也许这样在压力中学习自己并没有品味到学习的真正乐趣。最后提出自己的两条建议，可以建议这位家长多和孩子沟通，带她去野营，做运动来缓解她的压力，同时改变自己对成功的看法，并非所有成绩好的孩子将来就成功，强调态度看法的改变才是解决问题的根本。

【亮点说明】本文有难度，对字数要求也比较多，对于初中英语的作文，着重考察学生连词成句的能力，要在“准”字上下功夫。在写作中作者注意了人称与谓语动词的数关系和动词时态等诸多方面。对于中学作文的写作，能将所学的知识运用到作文中，写出富于变化、结构紧凑的文章，不出现中式英文。这能看出该生的写作功力。

考点：提纲类写作