Question

【题目】书面表达

Write at least 60 words with the topic “A heavy smog day” .（以“大雾霾天”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）

提示：去年12月上旬，杭州笼罩在茫茫的雾霾（was shrouded in heavy smog）中，陷于重度污染（severe pollution）。人们戴口罩（wear masks）出行，雾霾天给人们的健康带来危害，给生活和工作带来不便（inconvenience）。请你就其中某一天，描述你的经历和感受。

Since last December, Hangzhou has been in severe pollution____________________

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Answer 1

【答案】Since last December, Hangzhou has been in severe pollution with heavy smog, which has caused a series of inconveniences and health threat to people’s life.

I still remember one dim morning. I was greeted by the heavy haze instead of birds’ singing and the fresh morning air as before. Then on the way to school, my father’s car moved like a snail with the visibility less than 500 meters. What’s worse, our PE lesson was canceled that day because of the poor weather. So we had no choice but to stay in the classroom, looking outside at the quiet playground, missing the laughter and joy once there.

How I wish there will be some relief tomorrow and that fresh air will come back soon.

【解析】

亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如in severe pollution，heavy smog，a series of，be greeted，instead of，on the way to school，like a snail，less than，what’s worse，because of，have no choice，but to，look outside，at the quiet playground，come back等。而Since last December, Hangzhou has been in severe pollution with heavy smog, which has caused a series of inconveniences and health threat to people’s life. / How I wish there will be some relief tomorrow and that fresh air will come back soon.等多种从句结构的运用，丰富了习作内容，使表达多样，是本文的最大亮点。