Question

11．假如你叫刘畅，你的朋友小明因为沉溺于电脑游戏，成绩日益下降．作为小明的朋友，你很担心，并决定给他写一封e-mail，帮助他改掉这个坏习惯，好好学习．
要点提示：
（1）说明玩电脑游戏的利弊．
（2）建议小明在课余时间多参加有意义的活动．
（3）你对小明的期望．
要求：
（1）字数：80词左右（开头与结尾已给出，且不计入总词数．）
 （2）文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信息．
（3）文中必须包括提示中所规定的要点，并可适当发挥．
参考词汇：be addicted to 沉溺于
Dear Xiao Ming，
How are you doing recently？
We take pride in that you are good at playing computer games．Computers are more and more important in our lives．Playing games on them can help us know more about computers，which is very useful for our future lives．But if you are addicted to it，it'll be quite harmful to you．It is not only bad for your health but also has bad influence to your study to spend too much time playing them．
Next you should take an active part in all kinds of activities in your free time．We all know you are a cute boy，you must do better in the study if you spend less time playing computer games．
Yours，
Liu Chang．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
①Playing games on them can help us know more about computers，②which is very useful for our future lives．玩游戏可以帮助我们了解电脑的更多东西，这对我们未来的生活是非常有用的．
①动名词playing作主语
②which引导的非限制性定语从句，修饰前面整个句子．
高分句型二：
It is ①not only bad for your health but also②has bad influence to your study to ③spend too much time playing them．花太多的时间玩它们，不仅对你的健康有害，而且对你的学习也有坏的影响，
①not only…but also不但…而且…连接前后两个对等的成分，谓语动词遵循就近原则．
②have influence to sth对…有影响
③spend time （in）doing sth花费时间做某事

解答 Dear Xiao Ming，
           How are you doing recently？We take pride in that you are good at playing computer games．Computers are more and more important in our lives．Playing games on them can help us know more about computers，which is very useful for our future lives．【高分句型一】But if you are addicted to it，it'll be quite harmful to you．It is not only bad for your health but also has bad influence to your study to spend too much time playing them．【高分句型二】【说明玩电脑游戏的利弊】
          Next you should take an active part in all kinds of activities in your free time．【建议小明在课余时间多参加有意义的活动】We all know you are a cute boy，you must do better in the study if you spend less time playing computer games．【我对小明的期望】
Yours，
Liu Chang

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