Question

【题目】Jim is completing a self-assessment（自我评价）form of health to find out if he is healthy.Read his results in the table below and write a letter to give him some advice on how to keep fit.

	always	often	sometimes	seldom	never
Do you sleep for less than 8 hours every night?		√
Do you have breakfast in the morning?					√
Do you have fruit every day?				√
Do you eat snacks like sweets between meals?	√
Do you do exercise for half an hour every day?					√

注意：1. 词数90词左右；开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；

2. 表达清楚，语法正确，可适当增加细节，以使上下文连贯；

3. 文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称。

Dear Jim,

I’m sory to find that________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

I hope my advice will help you.

Yours,

Mike

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jim,

I’m sorry to find that you don’t have a healthy lifestyle. Here are some tips for you.

First, if you don’t have enough sleep, your body and mind won’t get a good rest. You’ll feel bad the next day. And breakfast can help you start the day well. Second, you always eat snacks between meals. It’s bad for your teeth and you get fat easily as a result. Why not have more fruit? An apple a day keeps a doctor away. Finally, it is important to take proper exercise to keep you healthy.

I hope my advice will help you.

Yours,

Mike

【解析】

本文属于话题作文，根据吉姆的健康评价为他提一些建议。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

亮点说明：这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如get a good rest, be bad for, as a result, why not, an apple a day keeps a doctor away, keep healthy, first, second, finally以及it is important to take proper exercise中it作形式主语，真正的主语为to take proper exercise。增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。