Question

16．你即将毕业，学校要举行2012届毕业典礼．假设你将作为毕业生代表在会上用英语发言，请写一篇发言稿．
内容包括：1．回顾几年来的校园生活．2．看今天自己的进步．
3．感谢老师和同学们的帮助；感谢父母的支持，向母校及老师们致以祝福．
作文要求：1．不能照抄原文； 不得出现学校和学生的真实姓名．
2．语句连贯，词数80个左右．开头已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear teachers and students，
  It's a great honor for me to have such a chance to make a speech at this special moment and special place．First，I would like to say"thank you"to all the teachers and the students here．It has been three years since we came to the beautiful school．When we were here three years ago，we found everything new and strange．We were curious about everything．
Our teachers are very friendly and helpful．They always try to make their lessons lively and interesting．When we have difficulties in learning，they are patient enough to help us．We could hardly succeed without our teachers'efforts．We've also made lots of friends here．We study together，play together and help each other．We feel very happy in the school．Also，I want to say"thank you"to out parents．Thanks for their support．Thanks for what they have do ne for us．
Last，I wish our school more and more beautiful，our teachers healthy and happy，and all of us a good future!
Thank you very much indeed．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是作为毕业生代表在会上用英语发言，回顾几年来的校园生活并表示感激之情．时态主要为一般现在时和一般过去时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．回顾几年来的校园生活．2．看今天自己的进步．
3．感谢老师和同学们的帮助；感谢父母的支持，向母校及老师们致以祝福．

常用到的重点短语：
be curious about 对…好奇
try to do sth 尽力做某事
make friends 交朋友
make…adj  让…怎么样
thanks for…因为…而谢谢
【高分句型】
1．①When we ②have difficulties in learning，they are ③patient enough to help us．
①when引导的时间状语从句．
②have difficulties in doing sth 做某事有困难．
③形容词+enough+to do sth 足够怎么样做某事
2．①Thanks for ②what they have done for us．
①thanks for…因为…而谢谢．
②what 引导的宾语从句，作为for的宾语．

解答 Dear teachers and students，
     It's a great honor for me to have such a chance to make a speech at this special moment and special place．First，I would like to say"thank you"to all the teachers and the students here．
     It has been three years since we came to the beautiful school．When we were here three years ago，we found everything new and strange．We were curious about everything．（回顾几年来的校园生活）
     Our teachers are very friendly and helpful．They always try to make their lessons lively and interesting．When we have difficulties in learning，they are patient enough to help us．【高分句型】We could hardly succeed without our teachers'efforts．（看今天自己的进步）We've also made lots of friends here．We study together，play together and help each other．We feel very happy in the school．Also，I want to say"thank you"to our parents．Thanks for their support．Thanks for what they have done for us．【高分句型】（感谢老师和同学们的帮助；感谢父母的支持）
   Last，I wish our school more and more beautiful，our teachers healthy and happy，and all of us a good future!（向母校及老师们致以祝福）
   Thank you very much indeed．

点评 这是一篇给材料作文，本文已经给出了主要写作要点，动笔前要先认真阅读要点，然后围绕要点适当发挥．写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上．语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯．适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系．