Question

16．假如你是李华，即将初中毕业．请根据下面表格中的提示内容，给在读的学弟学妹们写一封信，讲述你对自己满意和不满意的方面，并希望他们在学校度过一段美好的时光．

满意的方面	学习努力，养成了良好的学习习惯
	乐于助人，尤其是帮助那些在功课方面有困难的同学
不满意的方面	很少锻炼身体
	不常参加社会活动

要求：
1．语言流畅，行文连贯；
2.80词左右． （开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）
Dear friends，
How time flies and I'llgraduate from the junior school soon．
Since I entered this school，I have been studying hard and have developed some good study habits．As a result，I have been doing well in my subjects．And I have always been ready to help others，especially those classmates who have had difficulty in their lessons during the past three years．
However，I didn't take much exercise．I didn't often take part in social activities，either．
Now I hope you're having a great time at school．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是给学弟学妹们写封信说说你对自己满意和不满意的方面，并希望他们在学校度过一段美好的时光．注意信件的格式．时态主要为一般过去时和现在完成时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．满意的方面；学习努力，养成了良好的学习习惯，乐于助人，尤其是帮助那些在功课方面有困难的同学
2．不满意的方面；很少锻炼身体，不常参加社会活动
3．希望
常用到的重点短语：
study hard 努力学习
as a result 因此
do well in 擅长…
be ready to do sth 乐于做某事
have difficulty in  在…有困难
take part in 参加
【高分句型】
1．Since I entered this school，I have been studying hard and have developed some good study habits．
since引导的时间状语从句，常常和现在完成时连用．
2．I have always①been ready to help others，especially those classmates ②who have had difficulty in their lessons during the past three years．
①be ready to do sth 乐于做某事
②who作为关系词的定语从句，who作为从句的主语，修饰先行词classmates．have difficulty in  在…有困难
3．Now I hope you're having a great time at school．
hope后是省略了引导词that的宾语从句．

解答 Dear friends，
How time flies and I'll graduate from the junior school soon．
Since I entered this school，I have been studying hard and have developed some good study habits．【高分句型】As a result，I have been doing well in my subjects．And I have always been ready to help others，especially those classmates who have had difficulty in their lessons during the past three years．【高分句型】（满意的方面）
However，I didn't take much exercise．I didn't often take part in social activities，either．（不满意的方面）
Now I hope you're having a great time at school．【高分句型】（希望和祝愿）
Yours，
Li Hua

点评 考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示认真审题，确定文章的中心．注意文章文体、人称和时态．运用适当的短语表达中心思想，增加作文的可读性．完成提示词时也要符合事实．温馨提醒：考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等．
这篇短文使用了一些固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少．学习中注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理．