Question

【题目】书面表达(共1小题，满分1 5分)

请根据下面提示，以Modern Inventions为题，写一篇90词左右的短文。(标题、开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数)

Introduction	许多现代发明给我们的现代生活带来了巨大的变化。
Main body	冰箱	以前人们使用盐来帮助他们保存肉和鱼。现在人们用冰箱可以长时间保存食物……
	洗衣机	过去，人们用手洗衣服……现在人们用洗衣机洗衣服，人们有了更多的时间来放松……
	飞机	很久以前，人们主要乘船去旅行。现在……
	……	……(请例举一项现代发明，并谈一谈其给我们的生活带来的变化。)
Conclusion	总之，在现代发明的帮助下，我们的生活得到了极大的改善。

要求：1．文章条理清楚，语句连贯，必须包含以上要点，可适当发挥，但不要逐字翻译。

2．词数90左右(给出部分不计入总词数) 3．不得出现真实的校名和人名。

Modern Inventions

Many modern inventions have made great difference in our life．they have changed the way we live．

In a word, our life has improved greatly with the help of modern inventions

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version：

Modern Inventions

Many modern inventions have made a great difference in our life. They have changed the way we live.

A long time ago, people used salt to help them keep fish or meat. Now they can use the fridge to keep food for a long time.

In the past, people washed clothes by hand. It was tiring. With the help of the washing machine, people can have more time to relax.

In the old days, people travelled by ship. Now planes have made journeys more comfortable.

People used to keep in touch with each other by writing letters. It often took long time. Now they can communicate by e-mail. It’s easier and faster.

In a word, our life has improved greatly with the help of modern invention.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，介绍现代发明给人们带来的变化。结合所给材料，可知此处是现在和过去生活的比较，故本文主要考查一般现在时和一般过去时，人称为第三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：people used salt to…，Now they can use the fridge to…，With the help of…，It often took…等句式的应用。写作中注意运用时间状语，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系，注意文章结尾处要与开头呼应。

写作亮点：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头介绍了我们的生活中发生了巨大变化，接下来现在和过去人们的生活比较，像食物保鲜、洗衣服、旅行、通讯等，最后总括我们的生活在现代发明的帮助下发生了很大变化。此处a long time ago, in the past, with the help of, keep in touch with, in a word等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。