题目内容
【题目】图示作文:仔细观察下列四幅图片,展开合理想象,写一篇短文。
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要求:1. 话题作文或图示作文任选其一。
2. 词数在80~100词之间。
3. 要求字迹工整,语法正确,意思连贯,合乎逻辑,可适当发挥。
【答案】
It was a sunny afternoon. When school was over, Li Lei was on his way home happily. He felt very relaxed because the next day would be Saturday. Suddenly, he saw an old woman lying on the ground, the vegetables were everywhere. She looked terrible. Li Lei looked around, but found nobody. He thought for a while, "Help or not help?" He said to himself. If he helped the woman, she might ask him for money when she came to life. If he didn't do that, the old woman might lose her life. Finally, Li Lei decided to help her. Luckily, the old woman was saved. She praised Li Lei, "You are a good boy!" How helpful the boy is! Let's learn from him.
【解析】
试题分析:本题一篇看图作文,首先要认真看图,把握图片内容,明确本题的主旨:在遇到有人摔倒在地时,帮还是不帮?其次,在下笔前,要理清故事的来龙去脉。短文要介绍清楚故事的主要情节,人物的心理活动情况。短文用一般过去时态,第三人称进行表达。短文要注意意思连贯,合乎逻辑,中心突出,思想健康。
写作亮点:短文用一系列的过去动作,描述出了李雷在放学回家途中助人为乐的故事,叙述清楚,中心突出。描述放学时的情景, sunny与relaxed,放学与开心,情景交融。描述突发情况时,suddenly,扣人心弦。see sb. doing sth具体生动;两个look的排比句,增强了短文的节奏感。后面用了两个if引出的条件状语从句,描述了他当时的矛盾心理,生动形象。然后用两个副词finally, luckily引出故事的高潮与结尾。You are a good boy一句强调了本文的主旨。Let's learn from him更是升华了短文的主题。