我是一堵墙。

 一堵深灰色并不古老却被人们遗弃的墙。

 我生命的全部意义在于存在和缄默……

 一群孩子在我的身上大肆涂鸦,胡写乱画,我并没有对他们产生厌恶的情感。因为他们还小,还不懂事,当他们长大了就会明白是非对错。他们充满稚气的可爱的小脸上充盈着一种快乐,一种纯真。我喜欢这纯真的笑靥。

 一棵槐树依附着我不断的生长,由我承受他的绝大部分重力,根深深地扎入墙基,侵犯着我的领地,一副根深蒂固、欲横空出世的模样。我没有拒绝他的依赖,更没有为他的侵占而争吵,因为我爱那一片翠绿,那一片鲜亮,那一片枝繁叶茂。

 那不论有意还是无意的侵袭,我都没有吭声没有抗争,我并不了解基督教,更不领会“当别人打你左脸,把右脸也给他打”的座右铭。我仅仅是用自己的一点儿伤痛就换来了他人的快乐与满足,这不是脆弱,也不是胆怯,是忍耐吗?生活依旧如此,不算暗淡,但也并不多彩。

 又是一群孩子,他们手拿大刷子和涂料,仿佛又要大干一场了。我坦然地面对他们,并不想发表任何评论,但是看他们那认真严肃地表情,我衷心的祝福他们成为艺术家。而当他们离去,我才发现自己周身大变模样,原本沉闷的色彩被一片色彩斑斓极富想象力的色彩所代替……

 还是那棵老槐树。在风雨交加之中,我似乎随时都有崩溃的可能,然而那宽大的枝叶为我遮蔽了风雨的打击,他用坚固的根系握住我,我可以安静的面对暴风骤雨……日子一天一天过去,人生会有很多的不如意,但也不乏快乐、温馨。渐渐地,我明白,善待他人,就是善待自己。

 我的故事里,有对人生的小小感悟。

 [名师点评]

 此文构思及行文皆有巧妙之处:

1.妙在用心用新。揭示景、物包含的意蕴,可谓“用心”;独辟蹊径,角度有创新,可谓“用新”。作者以“物”的视角来描写和感悟人生--善待他人,就是善待自己。这样构思和行文可谓精彩独到,既用心又用新。

 河北一考生

 自古至今,我屹立在这里,风风雨雨--

 我是一堵墙,一堵在秦始皇苛政下建造的墙。没错,我就是万里长城,一堵长长的城墙,我是用黎民的血肉和汗水筑就的,建造之日我就有了灵魂。锻炼

 我是一堵隔开生死两界的墙。有一天,一女子来到我的脚下,据称是姜家的大女儿,向我哭诉生死两茫茫。当时我看到的是,孟姜女不是一个人,而是一批人。原来我的诞生是建立在别人的生命之上!既然是这样,我为什么要苟活于世上?我轰然倒塌……我是罪恶的一堵墙!

 不知过了多久,我被重新唤起。我又得到了第二次生命。我如涅盘的凤凰,欲火重生,我懂得了我的职责所在,那是千百次的梦呓呵,保家卫国,保家卫国……匈奴来犯,我用自己结实的胸膛将他们挡在外面,他们愤怒了,发疯般地向我射去。痛,痛彻心扉!但我决不会向他们妥协!我要履行我的职责。看着匈奴沮丧的的背影,看着遍体鳞伤的自己,我笑了,我终于可以把自己从罪恶中救赎出来。我是无愧于天地的一堵墙!

 横扫六合的战车,西出阳关的商旅,打着呼哨浑身酒气的成吉思汗的铁骑,从这墙前骄傲地走过去。沧桑巨变,我见证了一个个朝代的兴衰存亡,一个个帝王将相的悲欢离合。年年岁岁花相似,岁岁年年人不同,我有所感悟:天地萌生了万物,每个事物,来到这世上,都有自己应尽的职责,但并不都是轰轰烈烈的。像我,只是一堵保家卫国、再普通不过的城墙,但我并不自卑,因为我知道,我是外层空间能看到的地球上惟一的人工痕迹。我是雄伟的一堵墙!

 如今,我敞开胸襟迎来了四面八方的亿万游人。他们之中有总统,有商人,有教师,有学生,有开心的演员与体育明星。照相机咔嚓咔嚓响着,但响声又被哗哗的笑声淹没。我看到一位风姿潇洒的外宾,踏上烽火台的顶端,向什么人频频飞吻,接着高举双臂,做成一个V字,仿佛向着美好的未来,发出爽朗的笑声。如今,我是笑傲世界的一堵墙!

 我是一堵墙,一堵平凡而伟大的墙,对于未来,我充满希望……

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 作为即兴的考场作文,考生善于调动积累,巧妙构思:

1.视角独特,文笔畅达。考生运用第一人称,采用拟人化手笔,以物的视角来叙事描写,这样更利于自然的抒发情感。文章先抑后扬,文笔畅达,有曲折,有波澜,有自信,有展望,表达工整简洁,明净爽利。

Every morning John goes to work by a train He always           86.

buys a newspaper, it helps to make the time pass more            87.

quickly. One Thursday morning,he turned on the sports         88.

page. He wanted to see the report about an important            89.

football match the night before The report was such interesting     90.

that he forgot to get off at his station He didn’t know it when      91.

he saw the sea He got off at the next station. and had to          92.

wait long time for a train to go back of course,he arrived        93.

very lately at the office His boss was very angry when Tom           94.

told him why he was late. "Work is very more important than      95.

football.

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在短文的空格中填入恰当的词,使全文意义完整、通顺。

Once upon a time there was a child ready to be  1 . He asked God how he could live on earth  2 so small and helpless. God replied that he had chosen one of the many 3 to take care of him. But the child 4 sure if he really wanted to go

He  5  and asked. “What  6  I Can’t understand people around me?”

God patted his head and said. “She will teach you the most beautiful and sweet words you will 7 hear.”

 “And what am I going to do when I want to 8 to you?”

God  9 to answer that question too,“She will place your hands together and will teach you how to  10

 “I’ve heard that on earth there are bad men. Who will  11  me?”

 “She will. even if it  12 risking her life!”

 “But l will be sad because I will not see you 13. ”the child continued warily.

God smiled,“She will often speak of me and will teach you the  14  for you to come back to me ever though I will always be  15 to you. ”

At that moment,there Was much 16 in Heaven,but voices from the earth could already be heard The child knew he had to start on his  17  very soon. He asked God one more question,softly, “Oh God,if l am about to leave now, please tell me her  18  . ”

God touched the child  19 the shoulder and answered,“It’s not hard to remember. You

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