85. feel改为felt〓与上文时态保持一致，整篇文章是叙述过去的事情。

书面表达：　

One possible version:　

Hi,Brian,

I'm glad you are interested in my hometown,New City,and ?I'm? now giving you a brief introduction to it.

New City lies in West China.It is a new city growing with the Great West Development.Firstly,the city has been designed to high standards,with broad streets and roads.Everywhere is green grass,beautiful flowers and trees alongside modern style high buildings.So the environment is wonderful.Secondly,public facilities are advanced,which makes the life of the citizens more convenient,such as facilities for transportation,education,and medical treatment.Large shopping centers attract a lot of people every day but the streets are not crowded since the population is not large.Of course the city is just going on its way and things will get on smoothly.

Talk to you next time.

Wang Ping　

84. water改为watering〓finish后接动词的?ing形式。 　

83. other改为another　 from one to another固定短语，意为“从一个(传)到另一个”

82. But改为So　 此句与上文有逻辑上的因果关系，并非转折，意思是“水在山脚下，因此我们……”。

81. it改为them　 此处代替名词trees。 　

80. trees后加were　 应为被动语态。 　

79. hardly改为hard　 hardly(?adv.?)意为“几乎不”；hard(?adv.?)意为“努力”。

78. √ 　

77. made后加to　 当make用于主动语态时，后接不带to的不定式做宾补，即make sb.do sth.；而当用于被动语态时，后接带to的不定式，即be made to do sth.。

76. 第二个to去掉　 此处near用作介词，意为“在……附近”，介词to多余。