Question

【题目】今年的6月21日是父亲节。假设你是李华，请你写一封信给你的父亲，表达自己对父亲的感激之情。要点如下：

1.父亲为家庭任劳任怨，努力工作；

2.父亲总是对未来充满希望，不断给孩子们“正能量”；

3.自己如何报答父亲。

注意：

1. 词数100左右；

2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

3. 开头和结尾已写好，不计入总词数。

Dear Dad,

I love you so much.

_____________________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】Dear dad ,

I love you so much. You are always working so hard to support our family. Working overtime and even doing a second job at weekends, you manage to provide everything I need and a warm and loving home for all the family members. Over the years, you have never complained even once about our living conditions. Instead, you have made great effort to help us live a happy life. You are always so encouraging, hopeful, and determined to give us a better future. As a child of years, I am truly happy and proud. Following your example, I will try my best to repay you.

Happy Father’s Day to the world’s best dad！

Love,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文。今年的6月21日是父亲节。写一封信给你的父亲，表达自己对父亲的感激之情。文章内容要点已经给出：a.父亲为家庭任劳任怨，努力工作；b.父亲总是对未来充满希望，不断给孩子们“正能量”；c.自己如何报答父亲。同学们在写这篇文章时，要注意以下几点：1. 写信表达自己对父亲的感激之情以一般现在时态最合适。2. 要点要齐全。但是不要对要点进行简单的罗列。可以使用适当的连接词，使上下文行文流畅，衔接自然流程。注意表达对父亲的感激之情与自己回报父亲层层递进。3. 注意语气。在父亲节时表达对父亲的感激之情与爱意，要带有尊重与感谢感恩的语气，感谢父亲为家庭做出的贡献。

【范文亮点】

采用了现在分词作状语（Working overtime and even doing a second job at weekends, you manage to provide everything I need and a warm and loving home for all the family members.）和状语从句（As a child of years, I am truly happy and proud. Following your example, I will try my best to repay you.）等高级句式。

采用了over the years；instead；made great effort等高级单词或短语，增添文章看点。