Question

【题目】假设你是李华，你的加拿大笔友Daniel来信向你求助。他最近和妈妈闹矛盾，因为妈妈不让他过多上网。他对此很不理解。请你给他写一封回信，要点如下：

1.建议他向妈妈道歉；

2.说明过多上网的危害；

3.列举一些健康的休闲方式。

注意：(1) 词数100左右；

(2) 可适当加入细节，以使行文连贯；

(3) 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Daniel,

I’m very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Daniel,

I’m very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction.

In my opinion, you should apologize to your mother, as she has done nothing wrong to prevent you from Internet addiction. Although the Internet plays an important role in modern life, we can’t ignore its harm to us. Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others, which may not only result in poor health and decline in study but also loss of communication in the real world.

As students, we should devote our energy to study. When available, you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games. Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封回信。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封书信，假设你是李华，你的加拿大笔友Daniel来信向你求助。他最近和妈妈闹矛盾，因为妈妈不让他过多上网。他对此很不理解。请你给他写一封回信，时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：In my opinion依我看来，apologize to sb. 向某人道歉，prevent from阻止，play an important role in在……扮演着重要的角色，spend some time (in) doing sth.花费一些时间做某事，not only…but also不仅……而且，keep fit保持（身体）健康， instead of代替 。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

亮点说明：作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如：Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others, which may not only result in poor health and decline in study but also loss of communication in the real world.定语从句的运用；Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily.倒装句的运用。本文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。