Question

1．假如你是李华，对学习英语很有热情，喜欢用英语交流，英语口语很流利．你叔叔因为生意上的伙伴来中国参观，需要一个临时翻译，想让你帮忙．因此周四的口语课你就不能上了，只好给你的外教Mr．Smith写个便条请假，向他解释原因并请求准假．
注意：1．词数100左右，开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
     2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Mr．Smith，
                                                             
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假如你是李华，对学习英语很有热情，喜欢用英语交流，英语口语很流利．你叔叔因为生意上的伙伴来中国参观，需要一个临时翻译，想让你帮忙．因此周四的口语课你就不能上了，只好给你的外教Mr．Smith写个便条请假，向他解释原因并请求准假．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息   2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：ask for leave请假；be good at 擅长；In addition另外；long to 渴望做某事；What's more而且；be grateful for 对…感激；Look forward to盼望；
You always tell us that we should seize as many chances as possible to practice our oral English．（高分句型一）
My uncle is running a big business with a man who comes from England．（高分句型二）
If you favorably take my request into consideration，I will be grateful for your kindness．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr．Smith，
      I'd like to know if I could ask for leave from your oral English class this Thursday morning．
      You always tell us that we should seize as many chances as possible to practice our oral English．（高分句型一）Here comes a chance for me．My uncle is running a big business with a man who comes from England．（高分句型二）Someone who is good at English is badly needed to help him．You know，my oral English is excellent，making me the suitable person to satisfy his need．In addition，I am always longing to communicate with other native speakers in English．What's more，my uncle phoned to ask me to do him a favor，but I don't know whether you will allow me the chance．If you favorably take my request into consideration，I will be grateful for your kindness．（高分句型三）
      Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．