Question

某海外学校举办英语训练营，开设了以下课程：园艺（gardening），烹饪（cooking），防身术（self-defense），护理（nursing ）。假设你是李华，写封申请信，报名参加其中一门课程的学习。

内容要点：1. 你感兴趣的课程；2. 你期望从中学到什么；3.为什么想学这些内容

Dear sir /madam,

 

 

 

 

 

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

One possible version：Dear sir /madam,

I am very glad that your school will hold the English summer camp which contains many courses, such as gardening, cooking, self-defense, nursing and so on.

I want to register to attend a course about gardening because I have liked flowers, grasses etc since I was a little child. I especially like playing in the garden where I can enjoy the beauty of nature. For one thing, I want to gain a bit more knowledge of gardening so that it can help me to major in the gardening after attending college. For another, I can realize the bitterness of the gardeners and treasure plants much more consequently. What‘s more, after graduation, I plan to devote my life to cultivate flowers and grasses to turn our country into a more beautiful state, attracting more foreigners to come to visit it.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本文要求根据提示内容写一封申请信，报名参加某海外学校英语夏令营开设的一门课程。书信的开始段应该提出写信的目的或者有关的事件，然后再围绕要点展开行文。根据本文中的要点提示，范文内容可以分为三个层次，1. 你感兴趣的课程；2. 你期望从中学到什么；3.为什么想学这些内容，而且写作时要注意这三个要点顺序不能颠倒。在时态方面应该使用一般现在时来介绍自己的兴趣爱好，因为是申请信，所以语言要简洁明了，通俗易懂。此外，为了让内容更加充实，写作时也要适当发挥想象。在表述这些方面时尽量使用多种句式结构，比如名词性从句，定语从句，介词短语，分词短语等以增加文章亮点，提高文章档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达段落清晰，层次分明，语言通顺流畅。在介绍要点时用到了表示层次关系和递进关系的连接词，比如for one thing , for another thing ，what is more等，这样有效地使段落更加层次分明，而不会给人杂乱无章的感觉。在句式方面作者使用了定语从句where I can enjoy the beauty of nature..状语从句since I was a little child等多种句式，尤其是文章首句I am very glad that your school will hold the English summer camp which contains many courses, such as gardening, cooking, self-defense, nursing and so on.和文章末句What‘s more, after graduation, I plan to devote my life to cultivate flowers and grasses to turn our country into a more beautiful state, attracting more foreigners to come to visit it.这两个长句的使用更加显示了作者较高的语言水平，而且也成为了文章的亮点所在。

考点：考查提纲类作文。