Question

【题目】写作内容

假设你是李华，你上个星期天去市图书馆看书时发现以下问题，你写信向馆长Mr Li 反映：

1. 新书太少

2. 书架上的书比较混乱

3. 阅览室的一盏灯坏了

4. 管理员工作时彼此闲聊，读者无法安心看书

注意：

1. 词数100-120左右

2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯

3. 信的开头和结尾已经为你写好，不计入总词数

Dear Mr Li,

Last Sunday, I went to do some reading in your library.__________________________________________

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So, for the sake of readers, I suggest that you change all these as soon as possible.

Yours,

LiHua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr.Li,

Last Sunday,I wen to do some reading in your library.Over the time I was there,I found something unpleasant.Therefore, I’d like to voice my opinions,which,I hope,would be of help for you to create a more comfortable place for readers.

First,there are few new books on the shelf,most of which are not popular today.Second,some books are not sorted in proper order,making it difficult for readers to find what they want quickly.Third,the assistant didn’t offer good service.Instead,they were chatting,which,made the raders not focus on what they read. Inaddition,they took no notice of the fact that a light wasn’t working. Leave this state of affairs to stay the same, and I am afraid there will be fewer and fewer readers.

So, for the sake of readers, I suggest that you change all these as soon as possible.

Yours,

LiHua

【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封信。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封信；你上个星期天去市图书馆看书时发现一些问题，你写信向馆长Mr Li 反映，内容包括新书太少、书架上的书比较混乱、阅览室的一盏灯坏了、管理员工作时彼此闲聊，读者无法安心看书；时态应为一般现在时和一般过去时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：library （图书馆），something unpleasant（不愉快的事情），voice my opinions（提出我的观点），shelf（书架），in proper order（良好的顺序），assistant（管理员），chat（聊天）等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

【亮点说明】

范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如定语从句Therefore, I’d like to voice my poinions, which,I hope,would be of help for you to create a more comfortable place for readers.；First, there are few new books on the shelf, most of which are not popular today.；Instead, they were chatting, which, made the raders not focus on what they read.；同位语从句Inaddition, they took no notice of the fact that a light wasn’t working.全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，first，second，in addition等词（组）的运用使得文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。