Question

13．假如你叫李华，你的朋友Jenny来信向你询问如何保持健康．请你给他发一封E-mail提些建议．内容要点如下：
1．注意合理饮食，多吃水果蔬菜；
2．保证充足睡眠，至少8小时；
3．坚持锻炼身体，多参加体育运动．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可适当增添细节，以使行文连贯；
3．邮件的开头结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数．
Dear Jenny，
How nice to hear from you!In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．I would like to give you some advice．
…．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来．本作文中给出的要点比较具体，故需要准确表达．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化．
【亮点说明】How nice to hear from you!感叹句位于句子开头；In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．疑问词加动词不定式运用巧妙；Since we grow very fast，we are in  need of nutritious food，such as fresh vegetables，fruits，fish，meat and so on．Since引导原因状语从句，在此表示一种客观事实；I think you'd better not eat food with much sugar and fat．宾语从句出现在句中；And you should get plenty of sleep，which is necessary for you to have at least eight hours of sleep every day．非限制性定语从句和动词不定式完美结合；Only in this way can you keep fit．部分倒装把文章推向了高潮；另外，However，In addition，的点缀，为文章增色添彩．

解答 Dear Jenny，
     How nice to hear from you!In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．I would like to give you some advice．
     As we know，food is of great important to us teenagers．Since we grow very fast，we are in  need of nutritious food，such as fresh vegetables，fruits，fish，meat and so on．（高分句型一） However，I think you'd better not eat food with much sugar and fat．And you should get plenty of sleep，which is necessary for you to have at least eight hours of sleep every day．（高分句型二） In addition，you should take physical exercise regularly．It will be beneficial to your health．Only in this way can you keep fit．（高分句型三）
      Best wishes!
                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                              Li Hua

点评 本文属于提纲类作文，动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题．平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果