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18．随着高考的结束，你即将升入高三，期末考试也接踵而至，家长和老师的殷切期望，能否实现自己的目标等，给你的身心造成了巨大的压力（烦躁，失眠，精神萎靡…），因此你写电子邮件向老师求助，你的邮件应含有：
1．情况描述2．求助内容3．约定交流时间和地点
注意：1．字数100左右
2．可适当增加细节以使行文连贯
3．请以规范圆体书写，你的书写直接影响你的作文分数3分．
Dear Ms/Mrs XX．，
My name isXX．I'm writing a letter to you to ask for some help．I have met many difficulties in my study．First，with thefinal examination approaching，I feel more and more worried every day．（高分句型一）Second，my parents and teachers have a high expectation on me，which makes me feel great pressure．As a result，I doublt whether I can achieve my goal at last．
Faced with so many difficulties，I have to ask you for some help．（高分句型二）Would you like to tell me how toreduce the pressureon me？I'm so puzzled right now and don't know what to do next．I hope I could have a face-to-face talk with you in your officeat 8：00 PM this Friday．（高分句型三）
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely
XX．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息随着高考的结束，你即将升入高三，期末考试也接踵而至，家长和老师的殷切期望，能否实现自己的目标等，给你的身心造成了巨大的压力（烦躁，失眠，精神萎靡…），因此你写电子邮件向老师求助，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：情况描述；求助内容；约定交流时间和地点
  2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：ask for some help寻求帮助；First首先；Second其次；As a result结果是；at last最后；a face-to-face talk 面对面的谈话；Look forward to盼望；
First，with the final examination approaching，I feel more and more worried every day．（高分句型一）
Faced with so many difficulties，I have to ask you for some help．（高分句型二）
I hope I could have a face-to-face talk with you in your office at 8：00PM this Friday．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Ms/Mrs XX
      My name isXX．I'm writing a letter to you to ask for some help．I have met many difficulties in my study．First，with the final examination approaching，I feel more and more worried every day．（高分句型一）Second，my parents and teachers have a high expectation on me，which makes me feel great pressure．As a result，I doublt whether I can achieve my goal at last．
      Faced with so many difficulties，I have to ask you for some help．（高分句型二）Would you like to tell me how to reduce the pressure on me？I'm so puzzled right now and don't know what to do next．I hope I could have a face-to-face talk with you in your office at 8：00PM this Friday．（高分句型三）
      Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                           Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                        XX．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．