Question

【题目】假如你是李明，你的外国朋友Tom 来信说他的健康出现了小问题－体重增加了，向你征求一些关于如何保持健康的建议。现在你给Tom 回封信，告诉他应该如何保持健康。

要点包括：1. 注意饮食 2. 加强锻炼 3.保证睡眠 4.保持好心情

注意：1.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。

2.词数100左右

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom.

I feel honored to tell you something about health. Here are some tips to keep healthy.

Firstly, you need a healthy and balanced diet. Besides, don’t eat the foods containing too much sugar and fat, which will make you put on weight easily. Therefore, you should cut down the amount of them. It is important to form good living habits such as taking exercise regularly and having enough sleep; at the same time, for the benefit of your health, it is necessary for you to have enough rest. What’s more, it is of great help to you if you are in a good mood. So feeling good is important.

I’m looking forward to hearing your good news that you are improving your health.

Yours truly,

Li Min

【解析】本篇书面表达要求给朋友回信，介绍一些关于如何保持健康的建议。书信是同学们熟悉的写作体裁，这使得文章的写作更加容易。在写作前要确定文章的时态和人称，根据本文要求可以判断应该用一般现在时和第一人称。写作要点必须至少包括以下要点中的四项：1. 注意饮食 2. 加强锻炼 3.保证睡眠 4.保持好心情。注意在写作时需用适当表示顺序的词来进行上下文的衔接，以增加文章的可读性和层次性。此外，还要尽量使用高级词汇和多种句式来提高文章档次。

【亮点说明】范文语言精练，层次分明，上下文连贯。运用了较多高级句型和短语。Here are some tips to keep healthy.是倒装句；…which will make you put on weight easily是定语从句；It is important to form good living habits和it is necessary for you to have enough rest是不定式作主语，it是形式主语；if you are in a good mood是状语从句。高级词汇和短语以及连接词：feel honored to…；Firstly…Besides,…Therefore ；cut down；put on weight；taking exercise regularly；for the benefit of your health；of great help；in a good mood以及hearing from也提高了文章的可读性。