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7．现在，很多学生由于缺乏自制力，对电脑游戏上瘾，结果造成很多危害．假设你是班长，请你用英语写一篇短文，发表在你班自办的英语刊物Showing English上，以便让同学们认识到电脑游戏的危害，从而戒掉这一不良习惯．短文内容包括：
1．浪费了本该学习的时间，影响学业；
2．对健康造成危害，特别是眼睛；
3．影响和他人的相处；
4．建议采用其他的方式度过休闲时间．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
参考词汇：对…上瘾be addicted to．
Some students think that playing computer games is interesting and relaxing．However，in fact，if you're addicted to it，it will be harmful to you in many ways．To begin with，it will make you waste too much valuable time which you should spend on your study or other meaningful things．（高分句型一）
As a result，you will fall behind in your studies．In addition，playing computer games for a long time will do harm to your health，especially to your eyes．（高分句型二）Thirdly，it will affect your relationships with your classmates，friends and family members．So，I hope that you can read more good books，take more exercise or listen to music to spend your spare time instead of playing computer games．（高分句型三）．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息现在，很多学生由于缺乏自制力，对电脑游戏上瘾，结果造成很多危害．假设你是班长，请你用英语写一篇短文，发表在你班自办的英语刊物Showing English上，以便让同学们认识到电脑游戏的危害，从而戒掉这一不良习惯，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：浪费了本该学习的时间，影响学业；对健康造成危害，特别是眼睛；影响和他人的相处；建议采用其他的方式度过休闲时间．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：However然而；in fact事实上；be addicted to 对…上瘾；To begin with首先；As a result结果；In addition另外；instead of而不是；
To begin with，it will make you waste too much valuable time which you should spend on your study or other meaningful things．（高分句型一）
In addition，playing computer games for a long time will do harm to your health，especially to your eyes．（高分句型二）
So，I hope that you can read more good books，take more exercise or listen to music to spend your spare time instead of playing computer games．（高分句型三）

解答 Some students think that playing computer games is interesting and relaxing．However，in fact，if you're addicted to it，it will be harmful to you in many ways．To begin with，it will make you waste too much valuable time which you should spend on your study or other meaningful things．（高分句型一）
       As a result，you will fall behind in your studies．In addition，playing computer games for a long time will do harm to your health，especially to your eyes．（高分句型二）Thirdly，it will affect your relationships with your classmates，friends and family members．So，I hope that you can read more good books，take more exercise or listen to music to spend your spare time instead of playing computer games．（高分句型三）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．