Question

5．假如你叫李华，最近在浏览新西兰的中学网站时，看到一位名叫Tom的留言，他计划在暑假期间到中国的北京旅游，希望能有一名中国的中学生作他的导游．你对此很感兴趣．请你根据以下要点提示给他写一封e-mail，介绍相关情况．
主要内容：1．希望做他的导游；
2．打算如何给他做导游；
3． 期盼他的回复．
注意：
1．字数100字左右．2．信的开头结尾已经写好，不计入总字数．
Dear Tom，
Recently，while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇书信体写作，根据题目一位名叫Tom的留言，他计划在暑假期间到中国的北京旅游，希望能有一名中国的中学生作他的导游．你对此很感兴趣．请你根据以下要点提示给他写一封e-mail，介绍相关情况．写作时注意以下几点：1．仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确以下信息：希望做他的导游；打算如何给他做导游； 期盼他的回复．2．提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文条理清楚，语气诚恳，格式正确，而且使用了多种句式和结构．比如，使用了For one thing，For another thing，使文章逻辑清楚，语言连贯；Learning this news，I am really willing to travel with you and introduce Beijing to you．使用v-ing短语做伴随状语；I am really willing to…I am supposed to…语气诚恳委婉，十分具有诚意；while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．while引导的时间状语从句，使句子更具有逻辑性，通顺明了．
I get to know your wishes that you intend to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation with a Chinese student as your guide．（高分句型一）
Learning this news，I am really willing to travel with you and introduce  Beijing to you．（高分句型二）
For one thing，I will keep you company to visit numerous great places of interest and enjoy the wonderful sightseeing．For another thing，I am going to tell you something of  Beijing's history．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
       Recently，while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．I get to know your wishes that you intend to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation with a Chinese student as your guide．（高分句型一）
       Learning this news，I am really willing to travel with you and introduce Beijing to you．（高分句型二）I know as a brilliant guide I am supposed to make your journey interesting and meaningful．For one thing，I will keep you company to visit numerous great places of interest and enjoy the wonderful sightseeing．For another thing，I am going to tell you something of  Beijing's history．（高分句型三）
       I am looking forward to the reply from you．With all my wishes you could give me this honor．
                                                                                                                                                                                                             Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．