题目内容
16.假定你是刘洋,浏览了去年曾在你校担任外教的Brown先生的博客,获悉他在骑自行车时不慎摔倒,右手骨折,你很挂念他.请依据以下内容给他写一封信,要点如下:1.慰问他的伤情;
2.举例汇报自己在英语学习方面取得的进步;
3.对他曾经的教学印象深刻,获益匪浅;希望他明年暑假再来山东.
注意:1.词数100左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯.
3.开头及结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数.
Dear Brown,
How worried I am to hear the news that you had your right hand broken while riding a bike.
Sincerely yours,
Liu Yang.
分析 本篇书面表达属于英文书信,根据提示信息慰问一下外教的Brown先生.写作时注意以下几点:1、仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,明确几个要点:慰问他的伤情;举例汇报自己在英语学习方面取得的进步;对他曾经的教学印象深刻,获益匪浅;希望他明年暑假再来山东.2、提纲是文章的总体框架,要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象.要依据提示情景或词语,按照一定逻辑关系来写.本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写.3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般过去时态.4.注意使用高级词汇和句式,以增加文章的亮点.
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑,层次分明,而且使用了多种表达:1.be anxious to do sth.急于做某事2.feel beter 身体感到好转3.Thanks to 多亏4.make great progress 做出巨大的进步5.be afraid of 害怕做某事6.in public 在公众场合7.in and after class 课内课外8.because of 由于9.up to now 到目前为止10.look forward to 期待
解答 Dear Brown,
How worried I am to hear the news that you had your right hand broken while riding a bike.I'm anxious to know more about your injury,wondering whether you are feeling any better now.(高分句型)
Thanks to your help I have made great progress in my English learning,especially in spoken English.(高分句型)I was afraid of speaking English in public before,but now I can express myself freely both in and after class.That's all because of your encouragement and help.
Up to now,I still have been impressed with your interesting and attractive English classes and I really benefited a lot.(高分句型)
Looking forward to your coming to Shandong again next summer and expecting you to recover as soon as possible!(高分句型)
Sincely yours,
LiuYang
点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯,比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词,使文章流畅、通顺,并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感.(1)认真审题,确定体裁. (2)构思要点.根据题目要求,理解要表达的要点.设计好文章的层次段落,考虑所用时态、人称等,把要点串联起来,构成文章框架.(3)选词造句,避难选易.(4)认真检查,避免错误.仔细阅读全文,查找是否有错,注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误,句式是否正确.逻辑是否一致.
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