题目内容
13.My brother and I were alone at home because my parents had gone for a meeting and they had left me in charge.I was doing my homework while my younger brother was watching TV.Suddenly the doorbell rang.My younger brother rushed to the door thinking that our parents had come home,he unlocked the door and opened it.Outside stood a tall man wearing a black raincoat and black rubber boots.He said he was a salesman and asked politely if out mother or father was at home.
Without thinking,my brother said:"No."He asked if we would like to buy some comic books which he was selling.I quickly explained that we were not supposed to buy anything without our parent's permission.
Then,as I was about to close the door,he forced his way into our house.He took out a knife and forced me to tie up my brother's hands with some rope which he took out form his pocket.I tied up his hands but tied it in a special way so my brother could untie himself.The man then tied my hands up and locked both of us in the kitchen.
Soon,the went upstairs to search the bedroom for valuables.I managed to teach my brother to untie the rope on the his hands.He then untied me.I rushed to the telephone to call the police, but the line was dead.The doors were all locked from the outside and I did not have the keys to unlock them.Luckily, the robber forgot to lock the kitchen window.My brother managed to get out of the house through the window and I told him to go to the police station nearby and call for help.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右.
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语.
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好.
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语.
分析 这是一个故事,所以人称用第一人称,时态以一般过去时态为主.内容包括两部分,一叙述带着警察抓住罪犯的过程;二这件事给我的体会.
(高分句型一)There we were told that robber was a wanted criminal who the police have been trying to catch for a long time.
首先句子使用了被动语态,we were told…;另外,在criminal后who引导的是一个定语从句,修饰criminal;
(高分句型二)By the time my parents had come home,they lectured us that,as children,we should see who it was outside out house before opening the door.
该句的时态使用较好,by the time 后接过去时,意思是到…为止;they lectured us that后接宾语从句,在从句使用who it was…陈述语气;
解答 After a while,my brother brought the police to our house.The policelet us hid somewhere and they went upstairs to catch the robber who was still there searching for valuable things.A few minutes later,there was a big noise and then the rubber was brought downstairs.We were very happy.But we had to go the police station to make a report.(高分句型一)There we were told that robber was a wanted criminal who the police have been trying to catch for a long time.The police thanked us for our excellent work.(叙述带着警察抓住罪犯的过程)
(高分句型二)By the time my parents had come home,they lectured us that,as children,we should see who it was outside out house before opening the door.And we shouldn't open the door to strangers,especially those who looked highly suspicious.I remembered and I thought I learnt an important lesson on safety and responsibility.(这件事给我的体会)
点评 这是一篇续写故事的作文.续写故事一定要和原文在内容和时态上连贯一致,所以熟读原文很重要.其他方面和一般的写作时一样的要求,词语运用正确是最主要的要求,也是阅卷老师给分的重点.