Question

【题目】假如你是李华，前不久你在网上买了一条丝绸围巾，打算送给妈妈作为生日礼物，却在收货时发现存在一些问题。请你就此给网站写一封投诉信。

要点如下：1.介绍情况；2.反应问题；3.提出解决方法。

注意：1.词数100左右 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear sir or Madam,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir/Madam,

I am one of your customers. Recently, I ordered a silk scarf for my mum as a birthday gift . To my disappointment, there are the following problems.

To begin with, it didn’t arrive on schedule, which missed my mum’s birthday and let me down. Besides, it is of the wrong color, which should be blue instead of red. Sadly, my mum hates red the most! What bothers me the most is the quality of the scarf. It is not made of genuine silk and even gives off a bad smell, making the whole thing absolutely unacceptable!

I am not satisfied to have received such poor service, hoping that you can return my money or deliver a new one to me .I’d appreciate it if you can take it into consideration.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours

Lihua

【解析】

本文属于提纲作文。

第一步：审题

假如你是李华，前不久你在网上买了一条丝绸围巾，打算送给妈妈作为生日礼物，却在收货时发现存在一些问题。请你就此给网站写一封投诉信。一、仔细阅读有关提点包括：1、介绍情况；2、反映存在的问题；3、提出解决方案。在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象，要依据提示情景或词语，按照要点所给的顺序写。时态是一般现在时和一般过去时。

第二步：关键词组

to my disappointment让我失望的是；let sb. down让某人失望；be made of 由…组成；give off释放；be satisfied to对…不满意；take sth. into consideration.考虑…等

第三步：遣词造句

To my disappointment, there are the following problems.

To begin with, it didn’t arrive on schedule, which missed my mum’s birthday and let me down.

I am not satisfied to have received such poor service.等

此外，应该意使用较高级的词汇和句子的衍接，以提高作文的档次。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密符合逻辑关系。也不要拘泥于要点的表达，可以适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果递进、转折关系的连接词语等。