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11．假设你是红星中学高一学生李华．你的英国笔友Jim在给你的邮件中提到他很想了解你上次外出旅行的情况，请你给Jim回信，内容包括：1．旅行目的地及时间；2．选择该地点的原因；3．旅行中的收获．
注意：1．词数不少于50；2．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Jim，
It is great to hear from you．I'm writing to share my last travel experience with you．
After discussing where to go during the May Day break，my parents and I went to Xi'an．We chose Xi'an for the followingreasons．（高分句型一）As is known to all，serving as the capital city of 13 dynasties，Xi'anis often calledthe birthplace of Chinese civilization．（高分句型二）Both my parents and I are interested in Chinese history，so the historical sites in Xi'an like the Terra Cotta Warriors and the ancient city walls were at the top of my family's travel list．Also，I'm doing a project about the Silk Road．The visit to Xi'an certainly benefited my research and deepened my understanding about the importance of the trade routes．
During our stay in Xi'an，not only did I appreciate the city's long history and rich culture，but visiting Xi'an made me feel very proud to be Chinese．（高分句型三）
How about your last travel？Looking forward to your reply．
Best wishes，Yours，LiHua

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息设你是红星中学高一学生李华．你的英国笔友Jim在给你的邮件中提到他很想了解你上次外出旅行的情况，请你给Jim回信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：旅行目的地及时间；选择该地点的原因；旅行中的收获． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：hear from收到某人的信息；As is known to all众所周知；serve as 充当，担任；be interested in对…感兴趣；not only，but （also）不仅，而且；Look forward to盼望；
After discussing where to go during the May Day break，my parents and I went to Xi'an．We chose Xi'an for the following reasons．（高分句型一）
As is known to all，serving as the capital city of 13 dynasties，Xi'an is often called the birthplace of Chinese civilization．（高分句型二）
During our stay in Xi'an，not only did I appreciate the city's long history and rich culture，but visiting Xi'an made me feel very proud to be Chinese．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Jim，
      It is great to hear from you．I'm writing to share my last travel experience with you．
      After discussing where to go during the May Day break，my parents and I went to Xi'an．We chose Xi'an for the following reasons．（高分句型一）As is known to all，serving as the capital city of 13 dynasties，Xi'an is often called the birthplace of Chinese civilization．（高分句型二）Both my parents and I are interested in Chinese history，so the historical sites in Xi'an like the Terra Cotta Warriors and the ancient city walls were at the top of my family's travel list．Also，I'm doing a project about the Silk Road．The visit to Xi'an certainly benefited my research and deepened my understanding about the importance of the trade routes．
      During our stay in Xi'an，not only did I appreciate the city's long history and rich culture，but visiting Xi'an made me feel very proud to be Chinese．（高分句型三）
      How about your last travel？Looking forward to your reply．
      Best wishes，
Yours，
Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．