题目内容
【题目】假如你叫李华,你校于4月27日组织了一次校园合唱节活动。请你根据以下要点,给你的美国笔友Jack写一封电子邮件,告诉他此次活动的有关情况。
1.活动的目的; 2.活动的时间、地点和方式; 3.你对本次活动的感悟
参考词汇:校园合唱节Campus Choral Festival
Dear Jack,
I am Li Hua, ...
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Sincerely Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Jack,
How are you doing recently? I miss you very much. Now I’m so excited that I can’t wait to share with you an unforgettable experience.
Last Friday, our school held a Campus Choral Festival, aimed to offer students a chance to show their talent for singing. It lasted 3 days and 18 classes participated in this competition. As was required, each class chose 2 songs to prepare and performed on the stage of our school concert hall. All the students were happy to seize this opportunity torehearse. With the help of teachers, wesang very well and ranked 5th among all the participating classes, which was received with much applause.
I am very happy that our efforts have paid off.The festival benefits us a lot. Not only does it help us share the spirit of teamwork and give us relaxation from heavy schoolwork, it has alsopromoted the friendship among us. What a wonderful time!
Sincerely Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】试题分析:本次作文要求给你的美国笔友Jack写一封电子邮件,告诉他你校于4月27日组织了一次校园合唱节活动的具体细节。1.活动的目的; 2.活动的时间、地点和方式; 3.你对本次活动的感悟。写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要富有变化。要注意书写,认真查验是否有漏写情况等。
写作亮点:本篇条理清楚,要点全面,结构连贯。其句式上的变化既使得文章生动而流畅,也体现了作者驾驭句式的能力。例如:文章运用了定语从句which was received with much applause.和倒装句Not only does it help us share the spirit of teamwork and give us relaxation from heavy schoolwork,以及感叹句What a wonderful time!等。