题目内容
【题目】请你围绕“建设节约型社会,从我做起”的主题,根据下面所给出的要点提示,用英语写一封倡议书。要点提示:
1. 节约用水,避免不必要的浪费;
2. 节约用电,离开时确保关灯和其他电器;
3. 节约纸张等学习用品;
4. 主动向父母及周围亲朋宣传节约能源的思想。
不能逐条翻译,注意句子连贯、要点齐全。字数120左右,开头己给出。
Dear fellow students,
Our government is aiming to build a saving-based society.
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【答案】Dear fellow students,
Our government is aiming to build a saving-based society. I think it is every citizen’s duty to achieve, this goal.
As high school students, what should we do?
We should focus our attention on details around ourselves. We should form the habit of saving water, especially when we brush our teeth and wash hands, and never leave water running unnecessarily. Meanwhile, we ought to save electricity. Whenever we leave classrooms or our homes, make sure that the light and some electrical equipment have been turned off. Never, keep the light on in the daytime if unnecessary. We should also save every piece of paper as well as other materials. What’s more, we should offer to remind our relatives and friends as well as our parents to save energy.
【解析】首先审题,这篇文章要求写一封倡议书,围绕“建设节约型社会,从我做起”的主题。任务中给出的提示信息包含如下内容:1. 节约用水,避免不必要的浪费;2. 节约用电,离开时确保关灯和其他电器;3. 节约纸张等学习用品;4. 主动向父母及周围亲朋宣传节约能源的思想。抓住了这亮点,我们就抓住了文章的核心内容。其次选用正确的人称和时态,考虑用一般现在时,第一人称来写。然后写出单个句子,使用正确的连词,连句成段。具体来说,写这篇文章时,要注意:1、提示中的内容比较泛泛,需要适当补充;2、为使文章层次清楚,可分三个自然段写:第一自然段指出“建设节约型社会”是每位市民应尽的责任;第二自然段提出问题,作为中学生,应该做些什么;第三自然段具体说明“建设节约型社会”,中学生应尽的责任和义务。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高,要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题,给出的要点都需要包括,缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面,结构紧凑,是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语,为文章增色不少,如: form the habit of养成……的习惯,turn off关掉。还使用了宾语从句I think it is every citizen’s duty to achieve, this goal.等多种句式结构,增加了文章的可读性。