题目内容
【题目】你班将于12月24日下午1点在学校礼堂(auditorium)举行圣诞汇演。假如你是班长,请你根据以下要点用英语在班级QQ群里发一则通知,布罝相关亊宜。
要点:1.每个同学准备一个才艺节目;
2.积极参加游戏;
3.做文明观众
注意:1.词数100左右;
2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3.开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
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【答案】Boys and girls,
With Christmas approaching, a Christmas party will be held in the school auditorium at 1 pm on 24th December.
Everybody is required to show your talents, so you need to prepare a program in advance. Different programs are welcomed at the party, such as singing, dancing, crosstalk and so on. Besides, we have designed some games, hoping you will take an active part in them. You will get a big surprise by winning a game.
Please get there on time. While watching the performance, please mind your behavior. Do remember to take your litter away when the party is over.
That’s all. Thank you!
【解析】写好英语作文写作技巧要做到三步:
1、审题。审题是关键的第一步。看清题意,确定文章的中心思想、主题,并围绕中心思想组织材料。分析可知本文材料作文中,是口头通知,因此语言要简洁明了,通俗易懂。
2、进行构思,列出简单的提纲。审好题、立好意后,就要写提纲,打造文章的骨架。文章布局要做好几件事:安排好层次段落,铺设好过渡,处理好开头和结尾。本文主要针对将要举行的圣诞汇演在QQ群发一则通知。要点:1.每个同学准备一个才艺节目;2.积极参加游戏;3.做文明观众。
3、扩展成文。扩展的内容一定要紧扣主题,要灵活运用各种句式,如主从复合句、对比句、分词短语、介词短语等,从而增加文章的可读性。注意使用高级框架结构的句子,让文章的结构错落有致。用好连接词,注意段落间、句子间的连贯性。
【亮点分析】
在第一段用介词with引导的非谓语作宾补,用了一个被动语态叙述了主旨。With Christmas approaching, a Christmas party will be held in the school auditorium at 1 pm on 24th December.
第二段中使用了大量 被动语态,简洁明了,最后用一个非谓语hoping you will take an active part in them. 完美的表达。
最后一段使用了三个祁使句+省略句,让人感觉言简意赅,清楚明了:While watching the performance(省略句)祁使句:(1)Please get there on time., (2)please mind your behavior. (2)Do remember to take your litter away when the party is over.