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3．假如你是李明，你的外教老师Tom来信询问你校和谐校园的创建情况．请你根据以下内容提示，简要回复此次活动给你校带来的主要变化：
①园环境的变化；
②同学、师生关系的变化；
③学习氛围的变化；
④自己的感受；
参考词汇：harmonious 和谐的       environment 环境      attractive 吸引人的；迷人的．
注意：词数100左右，信的格式和开头语已为你写好，不计入总次数．
Dear Tom，
I'm writing to tell you something about the harmonious school activity，which makes many changes on our campus．
As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）On the one hand，the environment in our school gets better and better．With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）We can have a good rest and put our heart into study．On the other hand，the atmosphere among people is very harmonious．Students get along well with each other．We do respect our teacher and they also do love us．Our school is just like big family．We will have a good mood and enjoy being together．
In my opinion，I think we should try our best to build a harmonious school life．I like studying in such a beautiful school．Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）
Yours，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假如你是李明，你的外教老师Tom来信询问你校和谐校园的创建情况．请你根据以下内容提示，简要回复此次活动给你校带来的主要变化，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：①园环境的变化；②同学、师生关系的变化；③学习氛围的变化；④自己的感受；2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：As is known to all众所周知；On the one hand一方面；On the other hand另一方面；get along well with 与…相处的好；In my opinion以我的观点来看；
As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）
With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）
Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
       I'm writing to tell you something about the harmonious school activity，which makes many changes on our campus．
       As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）On the one hand，the environment in our school gets better and better．With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）We can have a good rest and put our heart into study．On the other hand，the atmosphere among people is very harmonious．Students get along well with each other．We do respect our teacher and they also do love us．Our school is just like big family．We will have a good mood and enjoy being together．
        In my opinion，I think we should try our best to build a harmonious school life．I like studying in such a beautiful school．Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）
                                                         Yours，
                                                        Li Ming

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．