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5．假设你叫李华，现是武汉大学的一名新生．请你根据以下提示，给你中学的英语老师李老师写一封感谢信，表达对他的感谢．词数100左右．
提示：
1．对英语李老师表达感谢．
2．回顾在校时考试的压力、堆积如山的作业和父母的高期望让你很沮丧，多亏老师的鼓励和耐心指导，让你成绩提高，终于实现梦想．
3．希望老师的学生都能进入理想大学．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假设你叫李华，现是武汉大学的一名新生．请你根据以下提示，给你中学的英语老师李老师写一封感谢信，表达对他的感谢，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：对英语李老师表达感谢．回顾在校时考试的压力、堆积如山的作业和父母的高期望让你很沮丧，多亏老师的鼓励和耐心指导，让你成绩提高，终于实现梦想．希望老师的学生都能进入理想大学2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】文章结构合理，语言流畅地道．全文没有中国式英语思维，体现出考生很好的驾驭英语的能力．文章层层推进，有理有据，情感真挚．语法方面：定语从句…，which I have been dreaming about；虚拟语气If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school…这些语法知识运用娴熟，显示了较强的语法功底，作文句式变得多样，表达更有条理；短语和搭配方面：范文使用了make progress、be admitted by…短语和搭配，使作文的内容变得充实．I am now a freshman of Wuhan University，which I have been dreaming about．（高分句型一）
If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school．（高分句型二）
At that time，the pressure of examinations，too much homework and the high expectations from my parents made me depressed．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr Li，
       I'm very excited to write this letter to express my gratitude to you．I am now a freshman of Wuhan University，which I have been dreaming about．（高分句型一）If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school．（高分句型二）
       Mr Li，I still remember the days when you taught me English．At that time，the pressure of examinations，too much homework and the high expectations from my parents made me depressed．（高分句型三）Thanks for your encouragement and guidance，I made progress and achieved my dream finally．
       I wish more and more of your students could go to their ideal colleges．Thank you for your help and support again and wish you all the best!
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．