题目内容
【题目】我们在求学过程中,总是少不了参加集体活动。假设你是星光中学的李华,将参加学校英文社举办的以"A Group Activity"为主题的征文比赛。请根据以下要点,写一篇120词左右的英语短文:
1.回忆你参加的一次集体活动;
2.谈谈你对这次活动的感想。
【答案】
Various group activities are never absent in my school life. Among these colorful activities, one is still fresh in my mind.
It was a climbing activity intended to relax ourselves, in which all of my classmates participated. A lot of guys even arrived ahead of time. A race between boys and girls attracted much attention as both felt confident. Once the race began, everyone ran, eager to be the first. However, since the weather became hotter, we girls faced our challenge. With face in boiling red, we seemed to be worn out. "Hold on ! Hold on!" Boys gave the encouragement and did some assistance. At last, we struggled to beat ourselves and reached the top. As for boys, they won the match without doubt.
Such group activities not only free us from heavy work for a moment, but also strengthen friendship between classmates. Besides, they build up our body, equipping us for more efficient study. As is expected by most students, such activities should be included much more in our school life.
【解析】
试题分析:本篇书面表达属于记叙文写作,根据提示信息和要求来写作。写作时注意以下几点:1. 仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,明确有哪些要点。2. 根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般过去时和一般现在时。3. 注意使用高级词汇和句式,以增加文章的亮点。4. 本文是记叙文,叙述内容应该具体详实,有声有色。
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑,层次分明,文章严格按照题目中所给的要点来写,开篇之后具体介绍了参加第一次集体活动的详细过程,最后谈了自己的感想和体会。还有一些短语的运用,比如Once,However,At last,Besides等插入语,使得文章语言流畅。另外,句式多样化,在It was a climbing activity intended to relax ourselves, in which all of my classmates participated. 中用了复杂的定语从句;Such group activities not only free us from heavy work for a moment, but also strengthen friendship between classmates.用了“not only... , but also...”连接的复杂句。此外,文章还使用了大量短语intended to, attracted much attention, eager to, worn out, build up等,使得文章一气呵成。
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