题目内容
【题目】请阅读下面短文,并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。
Lang Lang is a worldclass pianist who grew up in Shenyang. He went to a piano school in Beijing when he was just eight. “You need fortune,” his father said. “But unless you work hard, no fortune will come.”
What made Lang Lang sad was that his piano teacher in Beijing didn’t like him. “You have no talent. You will never be a pianist.” As an eightyearold boy, Lang Lang was badly hurt. For the next two weeks he didn’t touch the piano. Wisely, his father didn’t push him, but waited.
Luckily, the day came when his teacher asked him to play some holiday songs. At first, he didn’t want to, but as he placed his fingers on the piano keys, he realized he could show other people that he had the ability to do it well. That day he told his father that he wanted to study with a new teacher. From then on, everything got turned around. He started winning competitions. Soon it was clear that he couldn’t stay in China forever—he had to play on the world’s big stages. In 1997 Lang Lang moved again, this time to Philadelphia, the US.
There he spent two years practicing and by 1999 he had worked hard enough for fortune to take over. After his successful performance at Chicago’s Raviniu Festival, concerts in Lincoln Center and Carnegie Hall started pouring in. Lang Lang finally worked to reach the place where fortune spots him and lets him shine.
写作内容
1.用约30个单词写出上文概要;
2.用约120个单词就“成功”谈谈你的看法,内容包括:
(1)你认为获得成功的因素有哪些?
(2)简述坚持(persistence)对于成功的意义;
(3)举例说明坚持对你或你的同学的积极影响。
写作要求
1.写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句;
2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.不必写标题。
评分标准
内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。
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【答案】This is the success story of the world famous pianist Lang Lang, which indicates that though fortune is important, persistence is actually the key to success.
There are many factors that contribute to success. It is said that the most important signs of successful people are that they are enthusiastic, have positive attitudes towards life and show persistence.
In your lifetime, you may succeed at some point due to your talent or fortune. However, life is filled with hardships. You should face them bravely and finally achieve success by working hard. The secret of success is not to accomplish it at one stroke but to persist and never give up.
When I was in junior school, I often complained to my mother that it was impossible for me to work out the complicated maths problems. My mother encouraged me, saying, “You could succeed just because you still persist with your studies when others give up.” So, I asked my teacher for help and began to do lots of exercises. Before long, I made great progress in maths. And I realized for the first time that the secret of success is never to give up and to work hard.
【解析】本文属于读写任务写作,首先,要概括文章的大意。写概述的步骤:1) 先找文章的要点(一般指关键词和全文或段落的主题句,阅读时划出);2) 然后用自己的话转换(转换词汇和句式);3) 最后整合中心要点,并简化句子,连贯成30字左右的小段落。这篇文章主要讲了世界著名钢琴家郎朗的成功故事,郎朗的故事告诉我们尽管运气是很重要的,但是坚持才是开启成功之门的钥匙。然后,用约120个单词就就“成功”谈谈你的看法。第一,要认真审题,就“成功”谈谈你的看法。第二,要确定时态,这篇文章要使用一般现在时,举例时,要使用一般过去时。第三,要确定文章的结构。第一自然段概述你认为获得成功的因素;第二自然段简述坚持对于成功的意义;第三自然段举例说明坚持对你或你的同学的积极影响。在写作过程中,上下文意思要连贯,符合逻辑关系,一定要契合题目所给出的信息,不要出现偏题问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有文采。按照要点去表达,不能有遗漏,写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型,同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型,使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮点说明】这篇范文要点全面,语言精炼,简单句和复杂句交叉使用,如:This is the success story of the world famous pianist Lang Lang, which indicates that though fortune is important, persistence is actually the key to success. 这里使用了非限制性定语从句;When I was in junior school, I often complained to my mother that it was impossible for me to work out the complicated maths problems. 这里使用了时间状语从句。