Question

7．Two years ago，when I was an oversea student，I worked early mornings and late nights to pay for my school fees．
One day，I was seriously ill with a very high fever．I had stayed at home for a few days，and I had run out of food．Because I had been in this town just for a short time，I also had no friends nearby who could help．So I went out to get some food．I would have gone to the supermarket，but on this occasion，I went into a small store because it was closer．
I picked up a few items．When I handed them to the shopkeeper，she said，"You are unwell．""Yes，"I nodded．
She pointed at the salami and bread I was buying and offered，"I can make you a sandwich，so you don't have to do it yourself'．So，she made the sandwich and asked me to wait a moment．She went in the back room and returned with a bowl of hot soup．
"It will warm you up，"she said with a genuine smile．
What really warmed me up was not the soup，but her kindness．It made me want to be as kind as the shopkeeper who had been kind to me．
[写作内容]
1）请你以约30个词概括上文的主要内容．
2）请你以约120个词以"善举的影响"为话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：
（1）上文使你回忆起曾经有谁的爱心举动使你感到温暖；
（2）在感到温暖之余，你是否受到这个举动的影响，会把这份爱心传递下去？为什么？
（3）进入大学校园后，你将如何继续传递爱心？
[写作要求]
你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子．
When the author，an oversea student，was badly ill，a shopkeeper made him a sandwich and offered hot soup．Feeling warm with her kindness，the author decided to be as kind as her．
The passage reminds me of Miss Chen，my teacher of Chemistry，she just encouraged me not to give up．she even did everything to ease my anxiety．
It sounds like nothing big，but her act did make me feel warm．With such a teacher，there is no doubt that I will act as her in future．As long as I do so，others can also feel the kindness of Miss Chen．
When I enter a college，I will keep kindness in mind．If possible，I will try to become a youth volunteer，who offers help to other．No matter how hard it is，I will do my best to help those people in need．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：第一段：概况所给短文要点．第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由．第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 时态用一般现在时．人称用第一和第三人称． 重要短语：offer sth to sb（提供某人某事），decide to do（决定做某事），remind sb of sth（提醒某人某物），encourage sb to do（鼓励某人做某事），give up（放弃），ease one's anxiety （减轻某人的焦虑），act as（扮演，充当），keep sth in mind（帮某事记在心里），try to do sth（努力做某事），do one's best to do sth（尽最大努力做），in need（需要），enter a college（上大学）．
【高分句型一】
1．Feeling warm with her kindness，the author decided to be as kind as her．
此处是由现在分词短语"Feeling warm with her kindness"作原因状语，主句为"the author decided to be as kind as her"，主句的主语为"the author"与动词"feel"存在逻辑上的主动关系．
【高分句型二】
1．With such a teacher，there is no doubt that I will act as her in future．
此处是由同位语从句，结构为"there is no doubt that+从句"，"that"引导的同位语从句解释说明"doubt"的具体内容．
【高分句型三】
2．①If possible，I will try to become a youth volunteer，②who offers help to other．
①此处是条件状语从句中的省略，可以理解为"If it is possible"．
   ②此处是由"who"引导的非限制性定语从句，关系代词"who"在从句中作主语，先行词为"a youth volunteer"．
【高分句型四】
3．No matter how hard it is，I will do my best to help those people in need．
此处是由"No matter how+形容词+主语+谓语"构成的让步状语从句，也可理解为"However+形容词+主语+谓语"，主句为"I will do my best to help those people in need"．

解答 When the author，an oversea student，was badly ill，a shopkeeper made him a sandwich and offered hot soup．Feeling warm with her kindness，the author decided to be as kind as her．【高分句型一】（概括）
   The passage reminds me of Miss Chen，my teacher of Chemistry，she just encouraged me not to give up．she even did everything to ease my anxiety．（回忆曾经有谁的爱心举动使你感到温暖）
 It sounds like nothing big，but her act did make me feel warm．With such a teacher，there is no doubt that I will act as her in future．【高分句型二】As long as I do so，others can also feel the kindness of Miss Chen．（在感到温暖之余，受到这个举动的影响，会把这份爱心传递下去及原因）
   When I enter a college，I will keep kindness in mind．If possible，I will try to become a youth volunteer，who offers help to other．【高分句型三】No matter how hard it is，I will do my best to help those people in need．【高分句型四】（个人观点：进入大学校园后，如何继续传递爱心）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．