Question

学生李明到华山中学上学已经半个学期了。现在很焦虑 (anxiety)。原因如下1.高中的课程内容加深，变难，因为没有好的学习方法，学起来很吃力2. 因为腼腆（shy）,不敢问老师问题。3.原来学校的学习优势已经不复存在，导致学习信心下降。

假设你是心理老师裴老师，请给他一封建议信，帮他消除焦虑感，让他对华山的学习充满自信。（可以适当发挥，120词以内，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数，须使用以下连接词(first of all , what’s more, in addition, /besides …）内容要点如下：

首先（First of all），做出科学的学习计划…

此外（What’s more），上课要专心听讲，做好笔记…

还有（In addition），这儿的老师都很热心，善良，遇到难题向他们求教时千万别害羞…

另外（Besides）,请记住，并非你不优秀（excellent）,而是你有了更多竞争者（competitor）。你要做的就是更加努力地学习。相信你自己，你能做到的。(not that …but…)

Dear Li Ming,

I am sorry to hear about your anxiety. Don’t worry ! It’s normal for some students who have studied in Hua Shan High School. I’d like to share my tips with you.

First of all ,

What’s more ,

In addition,

Besides, please remember: not that

but

I hope my tips will help you feel confident.

Best wishes

Ms Pei

 

Answer 1

Dear Li Ming,

I am sorry to hear about your anxiety. Don’t worry ! It’s normal for some students who have studied in Hua Shan High School. I’d like to share my tips with you.

First of all , you should make a careful and scientific study plan. According to the plan , your goal is very clear. You know what you do, how to do, when to do.

What’s more , Listen to your teachers carefully in class. Remember to preview the lesson and make notes and review them after class.

In addition, all the teachers here are kind and warm-hearted. Don’t be shy to turn to your teachers for help when you come across some difficult problems from any subjects.

Besides ,please remember not that you are not excellent but there are better students in the campus. What you should do is to study harder. Believe yourself. You can do it.

I hope my tips will help you feel better.

Best wishes

Ms Pei

【解析】

试题分析：

题目要求写一封建议信，帮他消除焦虑感，让他对华山的学习充满自信。首先，做出科学的学习计划；此外上课要专心听讲，做好笔记；还有，这儿的老师都很热心，善良，遇到难题向他们求教时千万别害羞。你要做的就是更加努力地学习。相信你自己，你能做到的。适当发挥，120词以内，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数，须使用以下连接词first of all , what’s more, in addition, /besides …

范文切合主题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好。基本无语言错误。

亮点说明：

范文注意使用了一般现在时，对时态有较好的把握；

范文注意使用first of all , what’s more, in addition, /besides …等来衔接句子和段落，表示事情发生的时间顺序，使作文更有条理，做到了行文连贯。

范文使用了很多固定短语：be sorry to hear about, don’t worry等，使作文内容更加充实。

考点：材料类作文