Question

13．假如你是中学生李华，你市正在创建文明城市，请以"Changes I have seen"为题发表演讲，呼吁大家为"创建文明城市"做贡献．
要点：1．分享你看到的变化（如交通志愿者）；2．你的呼吁．
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．可适当增减细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
参考词汇：文明城市civilized city
Good morning，everyone!
It's a great honor for meto talk about some changes I've witnessed in the process of creating a civilized city．What has impressed me most is the traffic．We often saw pedestrians jump the red light．But now many volunteers stand at the crossroads，reminding the pedestrians to obey the traffic regulations．Of course，as educated citizens，we can do more to help our city to be more civilized，such as arousing the public's traffic awareness and helping more people to become more self-disciplined．
Just as the saying goes，"Individuals together can make a difference．"I believe our city will become more civilized and harmonious through our joint efforts．So I'm here to appeal to everyone to do your bit for our city．Only in this way will our city take on a new look and become a better place to live in．
Thank you for listening!
Thank you for listening．

Answer 1

分析 本书面表达是要求学生写"Changes I have seen"为题的演讲稿，是一篇典型的提纲作文，在写作之前要注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯．
【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如It's a great honor for me to…，Only in this way will…以及appeal to；还运用高级词汇self-disciplined，Individuals等等．并注意了句子的衔接如：So等等．
【高分句型】
 It's+形容词+for+sb．+to do sth．对某人来说做某事是怎么样的．（It's a great honor for me to talk about some changes，我很荣幸能谈谈一些变化．）  
Just as the saying goes，正如俗话说．
Only in this way will…，只有这样，才能…（Only in this way will our city take on a new look and become a better place to live in，只有这样，我们的城市才会焕然一新，成为一个更好的居住环境．）

解答 Good morning，everyone!
        It's a great honor for me to talk about some changes I've witnessed in the process of creating a civilized city．What has impressed me most is the traffic．We often saw pedestrians jump the red light．But now many volunteers stand at the crossroads，reminding the pedestrians to obey the traffic regulations．Of course，as educated citizens，we can do more to help our city to be more civilized，such as arousing the public's traffic awareness and helping more people to become more self-disciplined．
       Just as the saying goes，"Individuals together can make a difference．"I believe our city will become more civilized and harmonious through our joint efforts．So I'm here to appeal to everyone to do your bit for our city．Only in this way will our city take on a new look and become a better place to live in．
      Thank you for listening!

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．