Question

【题目】One day, Zeng’s wife decided to go out for shopping, but her little son insisted on going with her to the market. Thinking that she would come back very soon, and that the naughty boy would bring her a lot of trouble, she was unwilling to do so.

In order to persuade the boy to stay home, she told him, “Oh, come on, good boy, if you listen to Mom and then Mom will give you a present when I am back.”

“What present are you going to give me, Mom?” asked the son.

“We haven’t eaten meat for a long time, so I will kill our pig and let you enjoy a big nice dinner.” The mother comforted the boy when it happened that their pig was wandering in front of the house. Just at that time, her husband came back and heard what she said. Thinking of the nice meal, the boy gave in.

Not very soon, the mother came back, but what she saw shocked her. It was her husband who had killed the only pig of the poor family.

“Why did you kill it? You know that it is very important for my family.” she scolded him.

“I did that just for your promise!” Mr. Zeng answered.

[写作内容]

以约30个词概括这则中国寓言故事“曾子”的品质；

以约120个词，从“曾子”或者“曾子之妻”的行为任选一个角度发表你的看法，

并包括如下要点:

(1) 你认为“曾子”或者“曾子之妻”的不同的做法对孩子的教育会导致的结果是什么样的，并说出理由；

(2) 叙述你一次诚实守信的经历，并谈谈你的感受。

[写作要求]

1．可以使用实例来支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容论述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2．标题自定。

Answer 1

【答案】

Stick to what you promise

As described in the passage, Mr Zeng firmly kept his wife’s promise to his child, from which we learn that Mr. Zeng is worth depending on and good at educating children.

I can’t agree more with Mr. Zeng’s education method. Had I been his child, I would have formed a deep impression on it and gradually cultivated this quality. Just as an old saying goes, “Action speak louder than words.” If our parents themselves can do what they promise, we are likely to follow them.

The passage so well retained me the remembrance of an experience. Once, I made a promise to myself that I wouldn’t play basketball that week. Nevertheless, it is so fascinating that I even tried to persuade myself to enjoy it. In time, I resisted the temptation and kept my promise. Since then, I have realized that it is keeping our promise that makes us feel a sense of fulfillment and wins respect from others. So, please stick to your promise.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是提纲类作文。根据要求在第一部分用约30词的概括，要注意人﹑事﹑理的概括呈现，写作时不能摘抄文中的句子，必须要进行概括且能够使用较为高级的句型句式；在第二部分约120词的写作中一方面需要对“曾子”或者“曾子之妻”的不同的做法对孩子的教育会导致什么样的结果做出评价并说出理由，另一方面要能叙述一次诚实守信的经历并谈谈感受，写作时要把所要求的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。

【亮点说明】本文属于读写任务型写作，采用三段式，内容齐全，布局合理，使用高级句子。第一段中的“…from which we learn that Mr. Zeng is worth depending on and good at educating children”使用非限制性定语从句；“Had I been his child, I would have formed a deep impression on it and gradually cultivated this quality”运用了虚拟语气与倒装省略的结合句式；并且能够运用“just as an old saying goes, “Action speak louder than words.””的谚语为文章增色添彩，使用恰到好处。Nevertheless等连接词的运用也使得行文更为流畅。