Question

书面表达
假设你是李华强。时下,你校不少学生带手机上学。为此,你班组织了一次班会，讨论中学生上学是否有必要带手机。请你给英语笔友Tom写封信，根据下表提供的信息，客观地介绍讨论的情况。可结合你校实际进行适当发挥，并发表自己的看法。

一些同学认为	一些同学认为	你的观点
方便；时尚。	中学生自控能力差；玩手机浪费时间。	（请你实话实说）

注意：
正确使用英文书信的基本格式。
词数：120左右。

Answer 1

【参考范文】
Dear Tom,
I’m so glad to hear from you.
Recently we’ve had a class meeting to discuss whether it is necessary for middle school students to carry mobile phones to school.
Some of the students think that it is more convenient for them to keep in touch with their parents and friends if they have a mobile phone. And what’s more, it’s a fashion.
However, others think that middle school students are not old enough to control themselves. It is a waste of time for students to play games and send messages to each other by mobile phone. And it’s easy to cause the students to vie(攀比) with each other. If necessary, they can make phone calls by using public phones on the campus.
In my opinion, as middle school students we should put all of our heart into our studies though following the fashion is understandable.
What do you think of it?
With best wishes,                               
Yours truly,
Li Huaqiang

解析这篇作文是书信，首先要注意书信的格式，即：开头称谓,问候，正文，祝福，署名，缺一不可。作文的重点是正文部分，又分提出话题-学生是否有必要带手机，介绍不同的观点，自己的观点。这样才是完整的结构框架。
在表述观点时，要注意句型的合理运用，比如it句型的运用：it is more convenient for them to keep in touch with…./ It is a waste of time for students to play games and send messages to each other by mobile phone. /And it’s easy to cause the students to vie(攀比) with each other.非谓语动词的用法：middle school students are not old enough to control themselves. /they can make phone calls by using public phones on the campus. /following the fashion is understandable.省略句的用法，如：If necessary 另外，为了使文章连贯，行文流畅一些关联词必不可少，如：what’s more ，However ，In my opinion也使得文章的逻辑关系更加清晰。综上所述，这篇作文是一篇很好的范文。