Question

【题目】假如你是育才中学的一名英国交换生Tom。为了放松心情、结交朋友并了解中国的风土人情，

你计划这个假期去云南大理、丽江旅游。请根据以下要点撰写一篇博文寻找中国学生作为旅游伙伴：

1．时间： 2月2 1日-2月26日；

2．对旅伴的要求；

3．联系方式：电话：13012345678; E-mail:tommy1999@163.com.

注意：

1．词数100左右；

2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

I'm Tom, a British exchange student at Yucai High School.

Looking forward to meeting you.

Answer 1

【答案】

I’m Tom, a British exchange student at Yucai High School. I am planning to take a six-day tour of Dali and Lijiang, Yunnan Province, starting from February 21.

I’d like to find an outgoing and enthusiastic companion from a Chinese high school, who has a good knowledge of Chinese culture, especially about Yunnan local minorities. Besides, it would be nice if you have some experience in traveling. Above all, your good command of English will make sure free communication between us can happen. I sincerely hope we can relax, enjoy ourselves, make friends as well as improve our cross-cultural communication skills during this experience.

If anyone is interested, please contact me at 13012345678 or send me an E-mail to tommy1999@163.com.

Looking forward to meeting you!

【解析】这是一篇广告文写作。主要说明自己对旅伴的要求，以及希望从这次活动中能够得到一些收获。题目已经给定大致内容，写作时要注意适当增加内容，以保证文章的连贯性。第二段第一句” I’d like to find an outgoing and enthusiastic companion from a Chinese high school, who has a good knowledge of Chinese culture,”使用了定语从句来修饰companion，使得表达更加的丰富，有层次。第二段第三句” it would be nice if you have some experience in traveling.”运用了if从句，语气显得委婉，更容易让人接受。同时句子与句子之间用”especially”、”besides”、”above all”等不同的副词来连接，显得不单调。第二段倒数第二句，使用sincerely比用really更文雅。第二段最后一句“I sincerely hope we can relax, enjoy ourselves, make friends as well as improve our cross-cultural communication skills during this experience.”运用了as well as 句型来连接两个句子，比光用and来连接更好，让人感觉表达更书面化。最后要把联系方式写出来，这样作文就完整了。