Question

【写作内容】

Health Magazine做了一项调查，了解到现在人们的健康状况在下滑，主要原因如下：

1．工作忙碌，压力过大，缺少锻炼；

2．生活没有规律，熬夜，休息不够；

3．不少人有抽烟、喝酒的习惯，

4. 对空气、水和食品的污染加剧；

5．建议：适时放松，多运动，培养良好的生活习惯，戒烟，戒酒，保护环境。

【写作要求】只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

According to the survey made by Health Magazine, compared with the past, people are in poorer health. One of the main reasons is that people are living a busy life without taking enough exercise and suffer lots of stress. Besides, many people  lead an irregular life, stay up late at night or do not have enough rest. Worse still, a number of people have got into the habit of smoking and drinking alcohol, and the pollution to the air, water and food has got more serious. To change this situation, we should relax at a proper time, do more sports, form a good living habit, keep away from cigarette and alcohol and protect the environment.

【解析】

试题分析：考生首先要仔细审题，包括以下几个方面：（1）层次结构，（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，这是半开放性作文，要点需要考生拿捏准确以及正确，这加大了写作难度。再者考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。因为只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。又要包括所有的要点，考生要多使用复杂句，一句话中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：a number of people have got into the habit of smoking and drinking alcohol, and the pollution to the air, water and food has got more serious.就包含了几个要点内容。

考点：提纲作文。

点评：作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合作文要求，句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。文中使用一些极佳的词语和句子为文章增色，使用高级词汇及句型。