Question

【题目】根据下面的提示，写一篇题为“Smoking Is Harmful”的短文，说明吸烟的危害（100词左右）

现在有些青少年抽烟，他们认为吸烟是一种享受（enjoyment）。

事实上吸烟有害健康，对青少年危害很大。

科学家和医生通过实验发现吸烟导致一些疾病，如心脏病heart trouble、癌症cancer等。

世界上越来越多的人已经戒烟或决心戒烟，我们青少年更不应该继续做这种傻事。

我们学生应充分利用时间学习，做对祖国、对人民、对自己有益的事，养成良好习惯。

Answer 1

【答案】

Smoking Is Harmful

Now some middle school students smoke because they think smoking is an enjoyment.

In fact, smoking does harm to health especially to the teenagers. Doctors and scientists have found that smoking may cause serious illnesses, such as heart troubles or cancers. More and more people in the world have given up or have decided to get rid of smoking. We teenagers should stop doing such silly things, too.

We students should make full use of time to study, and do things to benefit our homeland, our people and ourselves. From now on, we should form good habits.

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